Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The chart illustrates the age of library members and the table displays the percentage of loan granted for purchasing books for library, while table represents the number of loans.

Overall, adults aged 18-64 accounted for the largest proportion of library members, whereas those adults aged 65 and above represented the smallest group. In terms of loans granted, majority of loan was granted to adult and children fiction category of books ,while children dvds accounted for lowest percentage.The total number of loans generally increased over the years.

Looking closely at the figures, the adults aged 18-64 represented the highest proportion of library users around 51% , followed by children accounting for 22% of total. Whereas, adults aged 65 and above represented 12% of share and young adults aged 13-17 accounted for 15% of the total.

Regarding loans, children and adult fiction accounted for 38% of loans, followed by adult non fictions accounting for 12% of the proportions. However, other categories including children's non fiction , young adults books , audio books for adults represented the lowest percentage. Children dvds accounted for the least proportion around 1% of the total loan.

In terms of number of loans, the amount of loan granted to library gradually increased to a value of 21000 in 2011 before declining to 19000 in 2013. Moreover, the figure grew substantially to around 22000 in 2016.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You cover all three visuals and provide a clear overview: adults aged 18–64 are the largest membership group, while the 65-and-over group is the smallest, and total loans rise overall. The key figures for membership and the main loan categories are mostly reported accurately. Your account of the loan trend also identifies the 2011 peak, the decline to 2013 and the subsequent rise. However, the description of the smaller loan categories is too general: children’s non-fiction was 6%, while young-adult loans and adult audio books were each 2%, rather than all being among the lowest in the same way. Also, the opening misidentifies the table as loans granted for purchasing books. More precise descriptions of what the table measures would strengthen an otherwise well-focused summary.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for membership, loan categories and the time series. This makes the main comparisons easy to follow, and linking phrases such as “Overall,” “Regarding loans” and “Moreover” help signal shifts. The organisation is coherent, but cohesion is not always smooth. “Whereas” begins a sentence fragment after the membership figures, and the repeated use of “accounted for” and “represented” makes some reporting feel formulaic. The opening also refers to the table twice in a confusing way (“the table displays…” and “while table represents…”). Use one accurate introduction and connect related comparisons within complete sentences to make progression more fluent.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of task-related vocabulary, including “accounted for,” “proportion,” “declining” and “grew substantially,” so the reader can understand the comparisons and trends. There are also attempts at more formal reporting language. However, some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward: “percentage of loan granted for purchasing books” does not describe the table, and “amount of loan granted to library” is not a natural way to refer to loans borrowed. “Adult non fictions” and “children dvds” also show inconsistent or incorrect forms. Aim for precise chart language and vary repeated terms such as “represented” and “accounted for”; this would make the vocabulary more natural and exact.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex forms, including a clear overview sentence with “whereas” and a time-series sentence describing a rise, decline and recovery. Meaning is generally understandable, but some grammatical errors remain. For example, “majority of loan was granted” is missing an article and has awkward singular agreement, while “children and adult fiction accounted for 38% of loans” needs clearer parallel structure to show that each category was 38%. The sentence beginning “Whereas, adults aged 65…” is a fragment, and punctuation spacing is inconsistent, as in the space before the comma after “books.” Review articles, plural forms, sentence boundaries and punctuation, while continuing to use varied sentence structures.

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