Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

as far as this graph description is concerned, the pie graph illustrates the age of library member , over the period from 2007 to 2016.

overall, it is evident that there are some noticeable tend and difference some aspects decrease and aspects increase and remain relatively stable.

moverover,the children fiction recorded the highest value whereas the childern DVDS remain the lowest vaue throughout the year.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response makes a limited attempt to summarise the visuals, but it does not accurately identify them: the age information is shown in a chart for 2016, not a pie graph covering 2007–2016. It also gives no meaningful account of the membership figures or the loan trend over time. The statement that children’s fiction had the highest share is supported, and children’s DVDs had the smallest share in 2016, but “throughout the year” is not appropriate because the category table covers one year only. The overview is too general to identify the main features. The response is also substantially below the required 150 words; develop the overview and report key comparisons from all three visuals.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic sequence: an opening description is followed by an overview and then a comparison of loan categories. The use of “overall” signals an attempt to organise the response, and “whereas” connects contrasting information. However, the response is only a few sentences and does not develop a clear progression through the three visuals. The overview refers vaguely to increases, decreases and stability without specifying what changed, while the final sentence shifts to the category table without a clear transition. Use separate, logically ordered paragraphs for the overview and key details, and connect each point explicitly to the relevant chart or table.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some task-relevant vocabulary, including “pie graph,” “recorded the highest value,” “lowest,” and “stable,” and attempts to describe trends and comparisons. However, the range is limited, and several spelling and word-choice errors make the writing less clear: “tend” appears to mean “trend,” “moverover” is misspelled, and “vaue” and “childern” are also inaccurate. “Pie graph” does not accurately describe the age chart, and “throughout the year” is an imprecise phrase for a table showing data in 2016. Build a more precise range for describing proportions, age groups and changes over time, and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts a few sentence forms, including a complex comparison with “whereas,” and the main ideas can generally be followed. However, grammatical control is uneven. In “the age of library member,” the article and plural form are missing; “there are some noticeable tend and difference” has problems with number and sentence construction; and “some aspects decrease and aspects increase” lacks clear, parallel phrasing. The opening sentence also combines the chart description with a time period in a way that misrepresents the relationship between the visuals. Use complete, carefully structured sentences, check articles and singular/plural agreement, and make sure each sentence clearly identifies its subject and time frame.

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