Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The chart illustrates the information about a public library in a town called little Chalfont between 2007 to 2016.

Overall,it is clear that in 2016 the number of loans ecperienced an upward trend,whereas in 2007 loans showed a downward trend.Furthermore,in 2011 loans recorded the highest figure,while in 2009 had the lowest.

In 2007, the figure of loan stood at lowest it is about 16 thousand.In 2008 and 2009 the number of loans are 19 thousand.From 2010 to 2016 students take much loans and 21 thousand is its people who takes the loan.

In little Chalfont library,adults take only 12% loan from library.children take 22 percent of loan. Yound adults like 13 to 17 years old took 15 percent loan.

Adults are usually like to read novel and books. It can take much loan in year 2016.

Adults in the age of 18 to 64 years old take more loan from chalfont library.And it is about 51 percent.

By contrast,adults take much loan as compared to other and the age od 65 above adults take less loan.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the topic and include some relevant figures, such as the 16,000 loans in 2007 and the 51% share of members aged 18–64. However, the overview misreads the main trend: loans did not fall in 2007 or peak in 2011; they generally rose from about 15,700 in 2007 to 21,700 in 2016, with only modest fluctuations. The lowest figure was in 2007, while 2016 was the highest. You also confuse the age-member percentages with loan shares: adults aged 65 and over were 12% of members, not their share of loans. To improve, summarise both charts accurately and report the major loan categories, especially the equal 38% shares for children’s and adult fiction.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has a basic paragraph structure, moving from an introduction and overview to details about loans and then membership. Some linking expressions, including “Overall,” “Furthermore,” and “By contrast,” show an attempt to connect ideas. However, progression is difficult to follow because the overview contains contradictory claims and the discussion shifts between loan totals, age groups, and reading preferences without clear organisation. The final paragraphs repeat that adults borrow more, while “It can take much loan” does not clearly refer to a specific category. Group the information by chart: first describe the overall loan trend, then compare membership ages and loan categories. Use references such as “this group” only when their meaning is clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “upward trend,” “figure,” “highest,” and “percent,” so the reader can recognise the general subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, such as “the figure of loan,” “take much loans,” and “take more loan.” “Students” is also not supported by the chart, which reports library members and loan totals. Spelling errors such as “ecperienced,” “Yound,” and “od” further reduce precision. Aim for concise, chart-appropriate expressions such as “the number of loans,” “accounted for,” and “borrowed.” Avoid adding claims about reading novels, since the data does not provide that information.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt a few longer sentence forms, including a contrast with “whereas” and a comparison introduced by “By contrast,” but most sentences rely on simple patterns and errors are frequent. Verb forms and agreement are often inaccurate: “the number of loans are” should be “was,” and “students take” should be “members borrowed.” Some clauses are incomplete or awkwardly formed, as in “while in 2009 had the lowest.” Articles, plurals, and sentence punctuation also need attention; for example, “stood at lowest” needs an article, and there are missing spaces after commas and full stops. Practise writing short, complete sentences with a clear subject and verb before combining them.

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