Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart given illustrate detail about a public library in a garden called small chalfont.

The bar chart illustrate the kinds of age library members.other, its describe the total loans by category.it is a children ,young adults,adults and adults and over.

in this detail,The adults 18 to 64%increase its a highest age of the library.But,The lowest age of members in 2016 increse the only 20%.actually, The young adults high on the member of age13 to 17% jump.

overview, The final and last one describe the adults no large change only 65 and over.it is not a different all of above only smaller cahnge.

The total number of loans (2007 to 2016). because,The start the 2007 only 15000 increase the number of loans. in 2008 jump the 15000 to 18000 loan.

But,2009 has no large cahnge . In 2010 rock the 22000 number of loan. in 2012 to 2016 has not larger change all of above only 15 to 22000 hightest number of loans.

In conclusion,The highest value of loan in 2016 the 22 to 23000 number.its a rocket value of the year.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify that the visuals concern library members and loans, and you include some figures from the loan chart, such as about 15,000 in 2007 and a rise by 2010. However, the response only minimally reports the information and several key details are inaccurate or unclear. The age figures are percentages, but claims such as the “lowest age…only 20%” do not match the chart: the smallest group is adults aged 65 and over at 12%, while young adults are 15%. You also omit the category-loan breakdown, including the equal 38% shares for children’s and adult fiction. The overview is not a clear summary of the main patterns. Select the most important comparisons and report them accurately, including the overall rise in loans to about 21,700 by 2016.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is an attempt to move from the membership chart to the loan figures, and phrases such as “In conclusion” signal a closing point. However, the information is not arranged into a clear, coherent report. The opening repeats “The bar chart” and gives an unclear description, while the paragraph beginning “overview” does not establish a meaningful overview. Ideas about age groups and loan totals are mixed with vague statements such as “no large change” and “only smaller change,” so the reader cannot reliably follow the comparisons. Some linking words, including “But” and “because,” do not show the relationship between the facts that follow. Organise the response into an introduction, a concise overview, and focused detail paragraphs, using clear references to each chart.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

Your vocabulary includes some relevant terms, such as “members,” “total loans,” “highest,” and “increase,” so the topic is recognisable. However, the range is basic and repetitive, and several word choices or collocations make the meaning difficult to understand. For example, “in a garden called small chalfont” misdescribes the town, “rock the 22000” is not an appropriate way to describe a rise, and “rocket value” is unclear. Spelling errors such as “cahnge” and “hightest” also reduce accuracy. Use precise chart language consistently: “accounted for,” “rose to,” “remained stable,” and “the largest proportion” would help you describe shares and trends more clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt simple statements and some longer sentences, but grammatical control is limited and errors frequently make relationships between ideas unclear. Subject–verb agreement is faulty in “The bar chart…illustrate,” and sentence boundaries are often missing, as in “members.other, its describe the total loans by category.it is a children.” Articles, plurals, and sentence structure also need attention; for example, “the highest value of loan in 2016 the 22 to 23000” lacks a clear verb and grammatical connection. Capitalisation and punctuation are inconsistent, with many sentences beginning after commas or full stops without appropriate spacing. Practise writing complete subject–verb sentences, then combine them with accurate connectors such as “while” and “whereas” to show comparisons.

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