Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given table and pie chart illustrate the public library in a town is called little chalfont library. The data pertains to a time period of 10 years between 2007 to 2016. Overall, the highest loans by category in children's fiction 38% in 2016 while the lowest loans by category in children's DVDs in 1%.

On a cursory look, it becomes evident that there are certain little chlfont library while which have increased across this time period. For instance, the highest number of age adults 18 to 64 in 2016. they are involved in many category like as adult fiction, non fiction, and audio books. However the lowest number of age adults 65 and overs.

In comparison, there are few areas which experienced a decline during the given time slot. To illustrate, number of loans 15000 in 2007.

In addition, some sectors same , like as 2009, 2009 and 2012 in mostly same.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify some relevant features, including the 38% shares for children’s fiction and adult fiction, the 1% share for children’s DVDs, and the rise in loans from about 15,000 in 2007. However, the response only partially summarises the charts. It gives no clear account of the overall loan trend, which rose to around 21,700 by 2016, and the statement that some years were “mostly same” is vague and repeats 2009. The age figures are also confused: adults aged 18–64 were the largest group, but the response does not report their 51% share or the other age-group proportions. Focus on the main patterns across all three visuals and support each with accurate comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is an attempt to organise the response into an introduction, an overview and further paragraphs, and linking phrases such as “Overall,” “For instance” and “In addition” show an effort to connect ideas. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the paragraphs do not clearly group information from the three visuals. The sentence beginning “On a cursory look” shifts between library membership and loan categories without a clear link, while “In comparison” introduces a decline but gives only the 2007 figure. Some references, such as “some sectors,” are unclear. A clearer sequence—overview, membership and loan categories, then the loan trend—would make the information easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “loans,” “category,” “decline” and “time period,” so the reader can recognise the subject. However, the range is limited and several phrases are inaccurate or awkward, such as “highest loans by category in children's fiction” and “number of age adults.” Repetition of “category” and “number” also limits precision. Some wording, including “cursory look” and “time slot,” is not a natural fit for a neutral chart summary. Choose precise terms for proportions, age groups and trends, and use them consistently. For example, describe the largest membership group as “adults aged 18–64” and the loan share as “accounted for 38% of loans.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts a few longer structures, including “Overall, the highest loans by category…” and “In comparison, there are few areas which experienced a decline,” but sentence control is weak and errors frequently interrupt meaning. Examples include the opening construction “illustrate the public library in a town is called,” the fragment “they are involved in many category,” and the incomplete comparison “However the lowest number of age adults 65 and overs.” Tense and sentence boundaries are also inconsistent, as in “number of loans 15000 in 2007.” Practise forming complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and use past-tense reporting consistently for the historical data. Accurate simple sentences should come before more complex structures.

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