Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The pie chart breakdown the numbers of ages of library staff members; in addition, the table illustrates the proportions of total loans took by different categories in the year 2016. The bar graph compare the trends of total loans taken by different categories between 2007 and 2016.

Overall, adults coverd more than a half of the proportions of the pie chart; in addition, children, youngsters and elder covered almost a half of the proportions. Children's fiction and adult fiction categories accounted for the greatest proportions of loans took initially; along with that, children's dvd acoounted for the least proportions of loans. However, the total numbers of loans experienced a rose initially; however, it slightly fall nevertheless, it peaked its trends by the end of year.

The pie chart provides that adults with aged between 18-64 coverd more than a half of the proportions ( 51%). In addition, children, youngsters with aged 13-17 and elder with aged 65 over more coverd almost a half of the proportions (49%). Looking at the table, children's fiction and adult fiction accounted for the greatest proportions ( 38%) of loans. However, children's dvd acoounted for the least proportions ( only 1 per cent) of laons. Other categories coverd remaining proportions.

Initially, the trends of loans experienced a rose. It was just over 15000 initially and rose from 15000 to just over 20000 in the year 2011; however, it fall from just over 20000 to just under 20000 by the year 2013. In the year 2016 it experienced a rose from just under 20000 and peaked its value to almost 23000.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify several important features accurately: adults aged 18–64 make up 51% of members, the two fiction categories each account for 38% of loans, and children’s DVDs are the smallest category at 1%. You also describe the broad rise, dip and recovery in loans. However, the overview is not fully precise: the other three age groups total 49%, which is nearly half, but the wording “almost a half” is awkwardly repeated. The graph is described as loans “by different categories,” although it shows total loans over time, and the final figure is closer to 21,700 than almost 23,000. More precise reporting of the graph and clearer coverage of the main comparisons would make the summary more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overview and separate paragraphs for the membership/loan categories and the time series. This helps the reader locate the main information. However, progression is weakened by repeated points: the overview and the next paragraph both state that fiction leads and DVDs are the smallest category. Linking words are also sometimes mechanical or contradictory, as in “however, it slightly fall nevertheless” and the repeated “in addition.” The final paragraph follows the years logically, but could distinguish the key stages more cleanly. Use fewer, more purposeful transitions and avoid restating details already given in the overview.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary such as “proportions,” “categories,” “accounted for,” and “peaked,” so the topic is generally clear. There is also some attempt to vary wording when describing changes. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or repetitive: “the pie chart breakdown the numbers,” “loans took,” and “experienced a rose” do not express the intended meanings naturally. “Staff members” misidentifies library members, while “youngsters” and “elder” are imprecise for the age groups shown. Spelling errors such as “coverd,” “acoounted,” and “laons” also reduce control. Build a more accurate set of chart-description phrases and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including clauses joined with “however” and “in addition,” and the reader can usually understand the intended comparisons. However, errors occur in basic sentence patterns and verb forms, for example “The pie chart breakdown” and “The bar graph compare.” There are also problems with tense and agreement in “it fall” and “children … covered,” as well as awkward age constructions such as “adults with aged between 18-64.” Some sentences combine several clauses without clear punctuation, particularly the overview’s repeated “however.” Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, past-tense forms and sentence boundaries before adding more complex linking.

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