Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The first chart above illustrates that the age of library members, childrens are 22% , young adults between age 13 to 17 are 15% , adults age 18-64 are 51% and finally adults age above 64 are 12%.

The Second chart shows total loans by category in 2016.

Children fiction loans are 38%, childrens non fiction loans are 6%,childrens dvds loans are 1%,young adults are 2%,adult fiction are 38%,adult non-fiction are 13%, and finally adult audio books loans are 2%.

Lets discuss about the third chart which shows total number of loans given year wise.

In 2007 total 15100 loans were given,in 2008 and 2009 the number of loans increased to 19000, in 2010,2011,2012 the numbers were above 20000 but below 21000 per year.In 2013 the numbers went below and hit 19000 per year, In Year 2014, 2015,2016 again we saw a increase in loans the numbers went over 20000 per year.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You report figures from all three visuals, including the membership shares and loan-category percentages, so the response is relevant to the task. However, the main features are not clearly summarised: there is no overview identifying adults as the largest membership group, fiction as the dominant loan category, or loans as generally rising over the period. Some trend details are also inaccurate or imprecise. For example, 2013 is about 19,600, not 19,000, and the figures for 2010–2012 are not all below 21,000: 2011 is approximately 21,000. The final years show a gradual increase, rather than simply exceeding 20,000. Add a concise overview and select the most important comparisons accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear basic sequence: it describes the membership chart, then the loan categories, and finally the yearly totals. This makes the three sources easy to distinguish, and phrases such as “The first chart” and “The Second chart” help signal the topic. However, the organisation is mostly a list of figures rather than a developed summary, and the opening of the final paragraph, “Lets discuss about the third chart,” is conversational and does not create a smooth report-style transition. Within the trend description, several years are grouped together without clearly explaining how the pattern changes. Use an overview paragraph followed by logically grouped details, and connect comparisons with precise linking phrases such as “by contrast” or “after a slight decline.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “members,” “total loans,” “category,” and “non-fiction,” and the reader can generally understand which figures you are describing. However, the range is limited and several expressions are repetitive or imprecise. “Loans were given” is not a natural way to describe library borrowing, while “the numbers went over 20000” is vague. The repeated use of “numbers” and “per year” also limits precision. Some forms and spelling conventions need attention, including “childrens” without an apostrophe and “year wise,” which is not idiomatic in this context. Aim for concise reporting language such as “the number of loans rose,” “accounted for,” and “remained broadly stable,” while keeping category labels accurate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

Most of your sentences communicate the intended information, and you attempt both simple statements and longer sentences that combine several figures. However, grammatical control is uneven, particularly in sentence boundaries, articles, and clause construction. For example, “In 2007 total 15100 loans were given,in 2008…” joins several independent statements with commas, making the sentence difficult to follow. “The age of library members, childrens are…” also has an unclear sentence structure, and “Lets discuss about” uses an unnecessary preposition in this construction. Capitalisation and punctuation are inconsistent, especially around year references and commas. Build shorter, complete sentences, use a consistent past tense for the historical data, and check articles and punctuation when listing comparisons.

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