Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The charts illustrated data about public library in a sector called Little Chalfont. Overall, it is clear that portion of adults 18 to 64 in library are greater than others in 2016. While portion of adults 65 and over are the lowest figure in graph.In addition percentage of individuals that taken loan in 2016 are much greater and 2007 is most smallest and also had different categories in 2016.

First looking at little Chalfont library the higher portion of library members are adults 18-64 and after that the percentage we saw are children that are 51 and 22 respectively. Furthermore, the number of library members that are average young adults 13 to 17 are 15%. The most smallest portion are adults 65 and over that is 12%.

In sharp contrast, 2007 are the lowest number of loan that is around 16,000. In 2008, 2009 and and further going years the ration loan almost remain same there was a fluctuations and at the end the number of laons in 2016 that is around 21,000. In 2016 we saw loan categories in which highest fiction of childrens is 38% and also fiction are almost same to this.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main feature of the membership chart: adults aged 18–64 form the largest group, while people aged 65 and over are the smallest. You also report the broad rise in loans from about 16,000 in 2007 to roughly 21,000 in 2016, and note the 38% share for children’s fiction. However, coverage is incomplete: the loan trend’s fluctuations are described vaguely, and the category breakdown is not meaningfully compared beyond the two fiction figures. There is also a factual mix-up when you say children and adults aged 18–64 are 51 and 22 respectively; the figures are 22 and 51. A clearer overview and more accurate, selective comparisons would make the report more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an opening overview is followed by discussion of membership and then loans. This gives the reader a basic route through the information, and phrases such as “First looking at” and “In sharp contrast” signal transitions. However, the progression is weakened by unclear links and repetitive or mechanical phrasing. The overview combines several points in a long, confusing sentence, while “In 2008, 2009 and and further going years” does not clearly explain the trend. The final sentence also stops after repeating that the fiction shares are similar. Use separate, focused paragraphs and connect each comparison explicitly to the relevant chart or category.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “portion,” “fluctuations,” “categories,” and “fiction,” so the reader can generally identify the subject of each point. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making the meaning awkward: “most smallest,” “ration loan,” and “number of laons” are examples. “The higher portion” and “different categories” are also imprecise for describing chart data. Aim for standard reporting expressions such as “the largest share,” “loan totals,” and “remained relatively stable,” and check spelling carefully. More precise vocabulary would help you compare the figures without relying on repeated general terms such as “number” and “portion.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, including a contrast introduced by “While” and a sentence beginning “In addition.” However, complex structures are often faulty, and errors in articles, agreement, sentence boundaries, and verb forms are frequent enough to make parts difficult to follow. For example, “public library in a sector” lacks clear article and preposition control, while “adults 18 to 64 in library are greater” has an unclear grammatical relationship. “2007 are the lowest number” also uses incorrect agreement and tense. Punctuation contributes to the problem in “graph.In addition,” where a space and sentence boundary are missing. Practise building accurate short comparisons before combining them into longer sentences.

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