Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The given data provides information relative to a public library in Little Chalfont.Fist of all we have a pie chart that illustrates the proportion of age of library member,then we have a table which demonstrates the total loans taken for various factors and at last we have a bar chart which compares the range of loan from [redacted phone].

By looking at the pie chart we can tell that major portion of library members were adults below age 65.And then another considerable portion of memners are kids. The teenagers were relatively small in number but slightly more than adults over the age of 65.

The table and bar chart collectively tells us about the loans category and their numbers.The table clearly shows that there were two major categories of loan which are for childern's fiction and adult fiction identicaly. However the bar chart demonstrates that the number of loans varies a slightly fro [redacted phone]. But if we comare from [redacted phone] we can see that number of loans have been risen from 2007 to 2016.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the three visual elements and report several relevant main features: adults under 65 form the largest membership group, children are another substantial group, fiction leads the loan categories, and total loans rise overall from 2007 to 2016. However, the account is only partial and often too general to show the scale of the data. For example, you do not give the membership proportions or the 38% shares for children’s and adult fiction, and “varies slightly” does not describe the fluctuations clearly. The overview also misses that loans peak at about 21,700 in 2016 after moving up and down, rather than rising steadily. Include a few accurate figures and make the key comparisons more explicit.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a recognisable progression: an introduction, a paragraph about membership, and a final paragraph covering loans. Linking phrases such as “By looking at” and “However” help signal movement between points, and the reader can generally follow the comparisons. This supports a coherent overall arrangement. However, the opening sentence is crowded and the sequence “Fist of all… then… at last” feels mechanical; the final paragraph also combines the table and chart without clearly separating their different information. Some references, such as “their numbers,” are vague. Use a concise overview after the introduction, then group related details into clearly focused paragraphs, with precise references to the membership figures, category shares, and loan trend.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough task-related vocabulary to communicate the broad subject, including “proportion,” “major categories,” “identical,” and “varies.” There is also some useful paraphrasing of the visuals, such as describing the chart as comparing loans over time. However, word choice and spelling errors are noticeable and sometimes make the phrasing awkward: “information relative to” is unnatural here, “range of loan” is imprecise, and “memners,” “childern’s,” and “comare” are misspelled. “Factors” is also not an accurate label for loan categories. Aim for precise chart language and check spelling carefully; terms such as “share,” “category,” “fluctuated,” and “overall increase” would make the description clearer and more natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including a contrast with “However” and a time comparison beginning “if we compare from 2007–2016.” The main message is usually understandable, but errors in sentence boundaries, agreement, articles, and verb forms are frequent enough to limit control. For instance, the opening runs several clauses together without spaces after full stops, “The table and bar chart collectively tells us” has a subject–verb agreement error, and “number of loans have been risen” uses an incorrect verb construction. There are also missing or awkward articles in phrases such as “proportion of age of library member.” Build accuracy with shorter, well-punctuated sentences, and practise agreement and past-tense forms when describing historical data.

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