Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The pie chart illustrates the info regarding the age of library members from a town called Little Chalfont,While the graph illustrates the the total number of loans given from 2007 to 2016.

The largest number of members that joined the library were adults,while the lowest number was of elderly adults that were above the age of 65.The graph shows the total number of loans were lowest in the year 2007 and highest in 2016.

The members that joined the library included 22 percent children ,15 percent young adults and almost 51 percent adults of age group 18-64 ,while the ones above that age were lowest in number.Furthermore,the total loans were highest in the fiction category and lowest in young adults and adult audio books,Whereas the children's and adult non fiction ranged from 6 to 13 percent.Moving towards the total number of loans from the year 2007 to 2016,the loans crossed above 20 thousand from year 2010 to 2012 and [redacted phone],While in all others years starting from 2007 the loans ranged somewhere between 15000 to 19000.

Overall, it shows the number of loans and in which catogery the loans were given out and who were the users.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main features: adults form the largest membership group, the over-65s the smallest, and total loans are lowest in 2007 and highest in 2016. You also report several relevant figures and compare loan categories. However, some details are inaccurate or unclear: the age figures are percentages, but “almost 51 percent” is not clearly distinguished from the other groups, and the smallest group is 12%, which should be stated. The category summary misses that children’s and adult fiction are tied at 38%, the joint largest shares; young-adult loans are 2%, not the lowest alone. The overview is also vague and does not summarise the overall rise in loans with fluctuations. Select the key comparisons more precisely and support them with accurate figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has an identifiable structure, moving from an introduction to broad observations and then to supporting details. This gives the reader a general sense of the charts. However, the progression is weakened by placing several different comparisons in one long paragraph, and the final sentence (“Overall, it shows the number of loans…”) repeats the topic rather than providing a clear overview. Linking words such as “Furthermore,” “Whereas,” and “Moving towards” are used, but some connections are awkward or do not clearly show the relationship between the data. Organise the response into a concise overview followed by separate details for membership, loan categories, and the time trend; use references and transitions that make each comparison explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “members,” “total number of loans,” “fiction category,” and “ranged,” so the main information is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several choices are imprecise or informal for an academic report. “Loans given” is less suitable than “loans made,” while “the ones above that age” is vague and could be replaced with “members aged 65 and over.” There are also spelling errors in “catogery” and “non fiction,” and repeated use of “number” and “loans” makes the description less precise. Use standard category names consistently and choose verbs such as “accounted for,” “rose,” and “peaked” to describe proportions and trends more accurately.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including a contrast with “while” and a longer sentence beginning “Furthermore,” and your meaning is usually recoverable. Some grammatical and punctuation errors remain. For example, “the total number of loans were lowest” has subject–verb disagreement; “the members that joined the library included…” is an awkward construction; and “in all others years” has an incorrect determiner and plural form. Several sentences also run together because commas are used where full stops are needed, as in the opening sentence and the long comparison paragraph. Capitalisation after commas is inconsistent. Check agreement, articles and plural forms, and divide long sentences so that each comparison is expressed in a controlled structure.

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