Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The diagram shows the information about a public library in a town known as Little Chalfont.

Overall, the number of individuals under the age group of adults would increase as compare to other age groups whereas the adults is to less than younger children.

First and foremost, the chart illustrates that the number of people under the age group 18-64 is to 51% as compare to children 22%. Therefore, the adults age group of 65 and over 12% would decline as contrast to younger adults 15%.

The table indicates about total loan by category from 2016. In constantly, the children fiction and adult fiction is on same level 38%. the second category is children non fiction 6% would decrease from adult non fiction 13%. Additionally, Adults audio books 2% is more than children's DVDs 1%. However, the young adults is to category in number of total loans by 2%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response identifies the charts and reports several relevant figures, including the 51% share for adults aged 18–64 and the matching 38% shares for children’s and adult fiction. However, the overview is unclear and includes an unsupported prediction that the adult group “would increase”; the age chart gives proportions for 2016, not a trend. The line graph showing total loans from 2007 to 2016 is omitted entirely, so a major part of the task is not summarised. Some comparisons are also confusing, such as saying adults aged 65 and over “would decline.” The response is 141 words, below the required 150. To improve, give a clear overview and cover the loan trend as well as the age and category charts, using accurate comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic paragraph structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for the age figures and loan categories. This gives the reader some sense of how the information is grouped. However, progression is limited because the overview does not clearly preview the main features, and the line graph is not incorporated. Linking phrases such as “First and foremost,” “Therefore,” and “However” are used, but some do not express a clear logical relationship between the figures. For example, “Therefore” does not explain the comparison that follows. Organise the report around the main chart features, use transitions only where they clarify a relationship, and make references between sentences explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some task-relevant vocabulary, including “age group,” “category,” “fiction,” and “non-fiction,” and it attempts comparison language. However, the range is limited and several phrases are unnatural or imprecise, such as “in constantly,” “on same level,” and “is to category in number of total loans.” Repeated use of “as compare to” also reduces fluency and makes comparisons harder to follow. These choices sometimes obscure otherwise relevant information, although the main categories and figures remain recognisable. Build a more accurate set of chart-description expressions, such as “accounted for,” “was equal to,” “compared with,” and “the largest share,” and check that each phrase fits the intended relationship.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts both simple statements and longer comparative sentences, but control is uneven. Errors in agreement and verb forms appear in phrases such as “the adults is” and “the children fiction and adult fiction is,” while “would increase” and “would decline” use an inappropriate conditional form for figures describing 2016. Articles and sentence boundaries are also inconsistent, as in “the adults age group of 65 and over 12%.” These problems make some comparisons difficult to interpret. Use straightforward present-tense reporting structures, for example, “Adults aged 18–64 made up 51%,” and check subject–verb agreement, articles, and punctuation. More accurate simple sentences would improve clarity before adding complex comparisons.

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