Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The pie chart compares the proportion of library members in four different age groups, while the table gives information about the category of the total loan. The bar chart illustrates the total number of loans was given during the period between 2007 to 2016.

Overall, adult group 18-64 experienced highest number of members, while adult fiction and children fiction were most popular. The total number of load loans increased between 2007 and 2016 with minor fluctuation.

In terms of pie chart, the largest amount of members were adults (18-64) at 51 members, however young and adults over 65 were both same around 12 and 15 members respectively, and 22 members accounted for children. According to the table children fiction and adult fiction proportion for loans were same at 38%, while the percentage of children non-fiction, children DVDs and young adults were significantly lower at 6%, 1%, and 2% respectively.

It is clear that the number of loans from 2007 to 2011 rose steadily around 22,000, which was dropped approximately below 20,000 loans and saw a slow increase rest of the year.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main patterns: adults aged 18–64 form the largest membership group, fiction leads the loan categories, and total loans rise overall despite fluctuations. You also include relevant figures for the age groups and several loan categories. However, some details are unclear or inaccurate: the age figures are percentages, not numbers of members, and the statement that young adults and those over 65 are “both same” conflicts with the figures of 15 and 12. The trend description also says loans rose to “around 22,000” by 2011, whereas the chart is closer to 21,000, and it omits the later peak in 2016. The overview is present, but fuller and more precise coverage of the trend and remaining loan categories would strengthen it.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for the membership and loan information. This gives the reader a sensible route through the charts, and linking phrases such as “Overall,” “In terms of,” and “According to” help signal the focus of each section. The progression is not fully smooth, however. The final paragraph compresses the entire ten-year trend into one sentence, and “which was dropped” makes the relationship between the figures difficult to follow. Some transitions are mechanical, while the comparison of age groups is confusing. Use clearer sequencing for the chart’s rise, fall, and recovery, and group related figures so each paragraph develops its point more fully.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a reasonable range of task-related vocabulary, including “proportion,” “fluctuation,” “popular,” and “steadily,” and the main meaning is generally clear. There are also attempts at more precise descriptions, such as “significantly lower.” However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward: “the category of the total loan,” “total number of load loans,” and “largest amount of members” do not sound natural in this context. “Experienced highest number” is also an unsuitable way to describe the largest age group. Aim for consistent terms such as “loan categories,” “total loans,” and “largest share of members.” More accurate phrasing would make the comparisons clearer and demonstrate stronger control of vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a contrast with “while” and a clause beginning “which.” Most of the message remains understandable, but some grammatical errors affect clarity. For example, “the total number of loans was given” uses an awkward passive construction, and “young and adults over 65 were both same” has problems with noun phrasing and sentence structure. In “which was dropped,” the verb form and clause construction are not appropriate for describing a fall in the figures. There are also missing articles and inconsistent sentence patterns. Practise forming accurate comparisons and trend sentences, such as “the figure fell to…” and “the two groups accounted for…,” while checking agreement and articles.

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