Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The pie chart, table and bar chart illustrate the information about little chalfont library in terms of age groups, total number of loans altogether and also by each category between the years 2007 - 2016.

In 2016, the large member group falls in the adults age group(18-64) , whereas the less number of membership holders were children. The most favourite categories in 2016, are children's and adult fiction, but the lease chosen categories were and young adults and adult audio books. Overall, there was a gradual increase in total number of material borrowed over the given period ([redacted phone]).

By 2007, initially 16000 loans were registered at library, however it increased gradually until 2011 at 21500 and fell slightly at 19000 in 2012 and rose upto 21000 again by 2014 and steadily increased until 2014 at 22000. In 2016, the major group of membership holder were people in the age group 18-64 at 51%, whereas the second largest was young adults(13-17) at 22%. The least membership holders were children and people over age 65, at 12% and 15% respectively.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover all three visuals and identify several important features, including the dominance of adults aged 18–64 and the prominence of fiction loans. The overview also notes that loans rose overall, which is broadly accurate. However, some details are misreported: children make up 22% of members, not the smallest group, and the 12% and 15% figures are assigned to the wrong age groups. The loan trend is also described inaccurately: it peaks at about 21,700 in 2016, rather than reaching 22,000 by 2014, and the dip occurs in 2013, not 2012. The category comparison is useful but could be clearer about the 38% shares and smaller categories.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, an overview and a body paragraph, and it uses basic linking expressions such as “whereas,” “however” and “Overall.” These help signal comparisons and the general trend. However, the progression is not consistently clear: the final paragraph moves from the loan figures back to membership data, repeating information already given in the overview. Some links also create confusing sequences, particularly “rose upto 21000 again by 2014 and steadily increased until 2014,” which repeats the same endpoint. Group the membership and loan-category data together, then describe the loan trend in chronological order. Clearer paragraph focus and more precise referencing would make the organisation easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a reasonable range of task-related vocabulary, including “age groups,” “categories,” “gradual increase” and “registered,” so the main information is generally understandable. There are also attempts at more specific phrasing, such as “membership holders” and “material borrowed,” but these are not natural collocations in this context. Several word-choice and spelling problems reduce precision, including “large member group,” “lease chosen” and “most favourite.” Repetition of “increased” and “group” also limits flexibility. Aim for standard chart language and accurate collocations; this would help you describe proportions and changes more precisely without making the account harder to read.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a contrast with “whereas” and a time clause beginning “until 2011.” The overall meaning can usually be followed, but some grammatical errors recur. For example, “the large member group falls” uses an unsuitable tense for data from 2016, and “the less number of membership holders were” has problems with comparison and agreement. Missing spaces and punctuation around brackets and commas also affect accuracy, as in “age group(18-64) ,”. The long sentence describing the loan trend becomes difficult to track because its clauses and time references are not controlled clearly. Use shorter, well-punctuated sentences and check articles, agreement and tense.

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