Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The charts illustrate the data about a public library in a town named by little Chalfont.

Overall, the thing is compeared in this chart is children or young adults to adult fiction, also in bar graph they show the amount of loans, even they takled about now we compear adults fiction

Initially, in the bar graph shows adults are whos are in library in 2016. Next the childrens are also memeber in they are still members in library and now the children fiction and adult fiction is almost 13 in 2016. In 2016 the loan demand is sharply increased above 20,000con

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response makes a limited attempt to describe the library charts, but it does not clearly summarise their main features. It mentions membership, fiction loans and the loan total, yet several statements are inaccurate or unclear: “children fiction and adult fiction is almost 13” does not match the chart, where each category accounts for 38% of loans, and the age figures are not reported accurately. The loan trend is reduced to a claim that it “sharply increased above 20,000,” omitting the overall rise from about 15,700 and the fluctuations across the period. The overview is also difficult to interpret. The response is 49 words below the required minimum, leaving too little space to select and explain the key comparisons. Organise the response around a clear overview and accurate details from all three visuals.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a basic attempt to move through the information using “Overall,” “Initially,” and “Next,” so the reader can see that the response is intended to describe the charts. However, the ideas do not form a clear progression: the overview shifts between age groups, fiction loans and the bar chart without explaining their relationships, and the final sentence introduces the loan trend abruptly. Several references are hard to follow, particularly “the thing is compeared in this chart” and “they are still members.” The response is also presented as one block rather than separated into an overview and supporting details. Use distinct paragraphs and group related information, such as membership and loan categories, before describing the trend over time.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some relevant task vocabulary, including “public library,” “members,” “loan demand,” “bar graph,” and “adult fiction,” which shows an attempt to describe the visuals. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the meaning unclear, such as “the thing is compeared,” “now we compear adults fiction,” and “loan demand is sharply increased.” Spelling errors, including “compeared,” “memeber,” and “takled,” also reduce accuracy. Aim for precise chart language and use terms consistently: for example, describe the “proportion of loans” by category and the “total number of loans” over time. Avoid vague phrases such as “the thing” and name the data being compared.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

There is an attempt to use more than simple statements, including “Overall” and “In 2016,” but sentence structures are often incomplete or inaccurately formed. For example, “Initially, in the bar graph shows adults are whos are in library in 2016” lacks a clear grammatical subject and has faulty clause structure. In “the children fiction and adult fiction is almost 13,” the subject and verb do not agree, and the sentence does not clearly express the intended comparison. Articles and plural forms are also inconsistent, as in “in library” and “the childrens.” Use straightforward, complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, then check agreement, articles and punctuation. A few accurate simple sentences would communicate the data more effectively than longer, uncontrolled ones.

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