Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

These charts illustrates the total number of loans taken each year from [redacted phone] and percentage of age groups of the library members alongwith loans taken from each category in 2016. Overall, it is clear that highest number of loan was taken in 2016 in which maximum proportion was covered by adults aged between 18-64, with highest percentage in fiction books.

From the bar chart, it is clear that maximum number of loans was taken in 2016 followed by about 22,000 loans in 2015 and 2011. However, the least proportion of loan was taken in 2007 after that it kept on increasing until 2011 when its proportion fall to almost 19,000 before rising again.

On the other hand, pie chart shows that in 2016 adult members took upto 51% followed by children which took 20% of the whole members. As for the young adults and adults over 65 they took 12% and 15% respectively. Whereas, the highest percentage of books was borrowed from children and adult fiction while the children DVD's and audio books were least borrowed with non-fiction books in middle.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover all three visuals and give a relevant overview, identifying the peak in 2016 and the prominence of adults aged 18–64 and fiction loans. Several details, however, are inaccurate or unclear: children made up 22% of members, not 20%, while young adults accounted for 15% and members aged 65 and over 12%—these two figures are reversed in your report. The loans chart also shows a rise to 2011, a dip through 2013, and then a recovery; your account says loans fell after 2011 but does not describe the later movement precisely. You also omit the category percentages and misidentify audio books as among the least-borrowed categories, although children’s DVDs were the smallest category. Select and compare the key figures more accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction and overview are followed by discussion of the loans trend and then the 2016 membership and borrowing categories. This makes the main topics easy to locate. Linking phrases such as “Overall,” “However,” and “On the other hand” help signal relationships, but some transitions are not fully logical: “On the other hand” does not clearly mark the shift from the time series to the pie-chart information. The final sentence also combines several category comparisons without explaining their order or giving figures, so the progression becomes less clear. Use one focused paragraph per visual or closely related pair of visuals, and connect comparisons explicitly, for example by distinguishing the two largest categories from the smallest.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of task-related vocabulary, including “proportion,” “category,” “borrowed,” and “followed by,” and the meaning is generally understandable. There are, however, some inaccurate or unnatural choices that reduce precision. “Proportion of loan” is awkward when referring to the total number of loans, and “members took upto 51%” does not clearly express that adults formed 51% of the membership. “Maximum” and “highest” are repeated where more precise alternatives would improve the report. The phrase “children DVD’s” also has an incorrect apostrophe and is not the natural category label. Aim for accurate collocations such as “accounted for,” “loan total,” and “children’s DVDs,” and use varied language to describe rises, falls, and shares.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including clauses introduced by “while” and “when,” and most of the message remains understandable. Some grammatical errors are noticeable, however. The opening has subject–verb disagreement in “These charts illustrates,” and “the highest number of loan was” needs plural agreement and an article. In “its proportion fall,” the past-tense verb should agree with the time period being described. The sentence beginning “As for the young adults” also has an unclear subject and verb pattern, while the final “Whereas” clause is left as a fragment. Check agreement, tense consistency, and sentence boundaries, especially when joining comparisons with “whereas” or “while.”

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