Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The chart illustartes information about a public library called Little Chalfont, It shows different types of categories such as age of library members, total loans by category and total number of loan through out the period from 2007 to 2016.

Overall, the age of library members in 2016 shows 51% of adults who;s age is between 18-64., 22% of children, 15% of young adults and 12% of adults over 65. Whereas the total loans by categoty in 2016 is Children's science fiction and adult fiction which is almost 38%. It also shows the total number of loans, in 2007 which was 15000 approximately and in 2016 the toal number of loan was more than 22,000.

Ithe number of loans increased from 2007 to 2008 by [redacted phone] where then it remained unchange in 2009 and in 2010 it rose up to 20000. There was a a fluctuation with up and down in the total number of loans from 2011 to 2016.the total number of loan in 2016 was more than 20,000.

There are 7 types of loans category where children's fiction and adult fiction had the highest proportion which is 38%, while adult non-fiction category is almost 13%. Meanwhile other categories have smaller portions of loans such as childrn;s non-fiction 6%, Adult audio books and young adults have the same percentage of 2%, whereas Children's DVD had the smallest percentage by 1% only.

Different age groups of library memebrs had been noted with highest age group of adults whose age is between 18-64, the sond is Children covering up with 22%, Meanwhile other age groups like young adults and adults 65 and over are only 15 and 2 pecent.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover all three visuals and identify several important features: adults aged 18–64 form the largest membership group, fiction accounts for the largest loan shares, and total loans rise overall between 2007 and 2016. The figures for the age groups and most loan categories are reported accurately. This meets the task well, with some features more fully covered than others. However, the overview is not clearly separated from the details, and the trend description is imprecise: loans peak at about 21,700 in 2016, not “more than 22,000,” and the 2010 figure is about 20,600 rather than 20,000. The final age-group comparison also incorrectly gives the over-65 group as 2%; it is 12%. A concise, accurate overview and closer checking of figures would strengthen the response further.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has some organisation: it begins by introducing the visuals, then discusses membership and loan trends, and later gives category details. Paragraph breaks help distinguish parts of the report. However, the progression is not consistently clear because information is repeated—for example, the 2016 loan total is mentioned twice, and the age-group ranking is revisited at the end. Connectors such as “Whereas,” “Meanwhile,” and “It also shows” are sometimes used mechanically or do not clearly express the relationship between ideas. The final paragraph also repeats earlier information rather than adding a distinct comparison. Grouping the response into a clear introduction, overview, and two focused detail paragraphs, with more precise referencing, would make the organisation easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for describing charts, including “proportion,” “fluctuation,” “increased,” and “remained,” and you distinguish categories such as “adult non-fiction” and “audio books.” This gives you enough range to communicate the main information. However, spelling errors and imprecise or repetitive phrasing are noticeable, including “illustartes,” “categoty,” “memebrs,” and repeated use of “total number of loans.” Some expressions are not natural for this task, such as “had the highest proportion” and “smaller portions of loans.” Use standard chart language consistently, and check spelling and category names carefully; for example, the chart says “Children’s fiction,” not “Children’s science fiction.” More precise collocations would make the report clearer and more fluent.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mixture of simple and longer sentences, including clauses introduced by “whereas” and “while,” and the main message is generally understandable. However, sentence boundaries and punctuation are often unreliable: the opening sentence joins two independent clauses with a comma, and “2016.the” lacks a space and proper sentence punctuation. There are also errors in sentence construction and agreement, as in “the total loans by categoty in 2016 is,” while “where then it remained unchange” shows an unsuccessful attempt to link clauses. The final sentence is difficult to interpret because its structure breaks down. Aim for shorter, complete sentences first, then add subordinate clauses with accurate verb forms and punctuation.

See this exact question answered at other band scores. The same prompt compared across bands.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.