Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie chart, table, provides information about the age of library members, loan taken by each categorory in 2016. The bar graph shows the percentage of how much loan is taken from 2007 to 2016.

Overall, it is clearly seen that adults, their age ranging from 18 to 64, were most visited the library, which is located in Little Chalfont. However, the senior citizens were visited lowest as compared to others. Children's fiction and adult fiction, both catagories took same amount of loan, while children's DVDs was lowest in loan taken. The ratio of loan increased throughout the period.

Looking at the pie chart, adults were the most visited individuals 51%, followed by the children which were 22% in 2016. Children's fiction and adult fiction, these two catagories took the highest amount of loan in 2017, which were same in both, 38%. Nevertheless, remaining all the catagories tok 24% loan.

In 2007, the number of loans was 16000, which increased to 21,000 in 2011. but, this was slightly rose to 24,000 at the end of period.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify several important features: adults aged 18–64 form the largest membership group, the two fiction categories each account for 38% of loans, and children’s DVDs have the smallest share. You also attempt an overview of the loan trend. However, some details are inaccurate or unclear: the chart shows the lowest membership among people aged 65 and over (12%), not simply “senior citizens” without a figure, and loans rise to about 21,700 in 2016, not 24,000. The category figures refer to 2016, not 2017, and the remaining categories do not collectively represent one category. The trend also fluctuates after 2011 rather than increasing steadily. More accurate reporting and fuller coverage of the age groups and yearly pattern would strengthen the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and paragraphs addressing the membership and loan information. This gives the reader a coherent overall arrangement. Some connections and references, however, are unclear or mechanical. For example, “The pie chart, table” does not clearly distinguish the visuals, while “these two categories” and “remaining all the categories” make the comparisons imprecise. The final paragraph gives only a few points from the timeline, so the progression of the loan figures is difficult to follow. Organise the body more clearly by chart, and use linking phrases to show the rise, fall, and later recovery in loans. Clearer references to each group would also improve cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “library members,” “categories,” “loan,” and “period,” and you attempt to describe comparisons with phrases such as “followed by” and “as compared to.” However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward, including “most visited the library” for the largest membership group and “the ratio of loan increased” for the trend in total loans. There are also spelling errors in “categorory,” “catagories,” and “tok,” which reduce precision. Aim to use standard chart language consistently, such as “accounted for,” “share of loans,” and “total loans,” and check spelling and word forms before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and more complex sentences, including a contrast with “However” and a relative clause in “adults, their age ranging from 18 to 64.” The main meaning is generally understandable, but some grammatical errors remain. For example, “adults … were most visited the library” has an incorrect verb construction, and “which increased to 21,000 in 2011. but” has faulty sentence punctuation and capitalization. The phrase “children … which were 22%” also has unclear agreement and reference. Use direct, controlled structures such as “Adults aged 18–64 made up 51% of members,” and check verb forms, sentence boundaries, and pronoun references. Greater accuracy across these structures would improve clarity.

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