Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The two graphs ilustrate the age of library members in 2016 and the other represent the total number of loans from 2007 to 2016 and also there is a table that gives the information of about loans category in 2016 and their percentage.

In the pie chart there are four types of library members. 51% of members are adults 18-64, 22% are children, 15% are young adults 13-17, and 12% are adults that are over 65 in 2016.

The total loans by category in 2016 that the library get are seven. The categories and their percentages are children's fiction of 38%, children's non-fiction of 6%, children's DVDs of 1%, young adults of 2%, adult fiction of 38%, adult non-fiction 13%, and adult audio books of 2%.

Bar graph represents the total number of loans from 2007 to 2016. In 2007 the loan was about 12,000 approx. which gradually increase till 2011 which is 22,000. After that in 2012 it is decreasing till 2013 and it started growing again from 2014 till 2016.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You cover all three visuals and report the membership shares and every loan-category percentage accurately. However, the response gives little overview of the main patterns, and the line graph contains a significant misreading: loans were about 15,700 in 2007, not 12,000, and rose to roughly 21,000 in 2011 rather than 22,000. The later description is broadly correct, but it omits the overall comparison that loans ended higher than they began and gives no approximate figures for the later years. To strengthen the report, add a concise overview highlighting the adult majority among members, the dominance of fiction in loans, and the general rise in total loans, then select accurate key figures to support it.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response is arranged in a sensible order: it introduces the visuals, describes membership, reports the loan categories, and finishes with the trend over time. This gives the reader a coherent overall route through the information. However, the opening sentence is overloaded, and the report moves directly into details without a distinct overview of the main patterns. Some links are also mechanical, particularly the repeated use of “and” and “After that.” Use separate, focused paragraphs and clearer transitions to show how the visuals relate. For example, a brief overview after the introduction could summarise the largest membership group, the leading loan categories, and the overall direction of loan totals before the detailed figures.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for describing charts, including “percentage,” “categories,” “gradually,” “decreasing,” and “growing,” so the meaning is generally clear. However, some word choices and collocations are awkward or imprecise, such as “the library get,” “the total loans by category … are seven,” and “the loan was about 12,000 approx.” The spelling “ilustrate” is also inaccurate, and “Bar graph” does not accurately identify the visual, which is a line graph. Aim for more precise reporting language and avoid redundant expressions such as “about” and “approx.” A wider, more controlled range of terms for describing proportions and trends would make the account more natural and exact.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, and most of the information remains understandable. Some grammatical errors occur, especially in verb forms and sentence construction. For example, “the other represent” needs subject–verb agreement, while “the library get” should use a past-tense form to match the 2016 data. The sentence beginning “The total loans by category … that the library get are seven” is difficult to follow because its clause structure is incomplete or awkward. There are also inconsistent tense choices in the description of the chart. Practise forming clear comparative sentences and maintaining consistent past tense when reporting historical data; careful editing for agreement and sentence boundaries will improve accuracy.

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