Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

These cahrts ilustrats the information about the public library of Little Chalfont the number of loans and books borrowed from 2007 to 20016 .

If we catogrise all the memebers age vise more then half of the members 51% are adults with the age of 18 to 64 the second number in this chart is childrens they taks up to 22% the third number is adults with the age of 65 and over they taks up to 12% from the chart and the fourth one is younf adults with the age of 13 to 17 they taks up to 15% from the chart .

After that if look at the total loans by category form 2016 children's fictions are 38% children's non-fiction are 6% children's DVDs are 1% young adults 2% adults fiction 38% adult non-fiction 13% and the last one adult audio books are 2% .

In the bar chart showing the total number of loans over the time number starts from 15,800 in 2007 after that it jumped up to 19,000 in 2009 the number of loans grew bit by bit they reached upto 21,000 in 2011 and finally hitting a high of nearly 22,000 loans by 2016.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You cover all three visuals and include several relevant figures, such as the 51% share of members aged 18–64 and the category shares for loans in 2016. However, the response is mainly a list of data rather than a summary of the main features, and it lacks a clear overview of the most important patterns. The age figures are also misreported: the chart gives 12 for children, 22 for young adults, 15 for adults aged 18–64 and 51 for those aged 65 and over, whereas your account assigns these values to different groups and adds percentage signs. The loan trend is broadly described, but the 2016 peak and the fluctuations after 2011 could be reported more accurately. Select key comparisons and state the overall patterns clearly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a coherent overall arrangement: it moves from membership ages to loan categories and then to the trend over time, with each topic placed in a separate paragraph. This makes the information reasonably easy to follow. However, the linking is sometimes mechanical, particularly through repeated openings such as “After that” and “if we categorise,” and the long lists of figures are not grouped into meaningful comparisons. The final paragraph also describes a rise but does not clearly connect the later fluctuations to the overall trend. Use a concise overview followed by logically grouped details, and vary linking expressions so that relationships between figures are clearer.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “total loans,” “category,” “fiction,” and “non-fiction,” and phrases such as “jumped up” and “hitting a high” attempt to describe change. However, the range is limited and several spelling errors are noticeable, including “cahrts,” “ilustrats,” “catogrise,” and “memebers.” Some expressions are also imprecise or informal for an academic report: “the second number in this chart” and “they take up to” do not clearly describe proportions. Choose accurate terms such as “accounted for,” “share,” and “rose,” and check spelling carefully. More precise vocabulary would help distinguish membership proportions from loan-category percentages.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt longer sentences and use some time-related language, for example, “the number of loans grew bit by bit” and “they reached up to 21,000 in 2011.” However, sentence structures are often faulty or incomplete, and errors can make relationships between figures difficult to understand. The opening lacks clear sentence boundaries, while “If we categorise all the members age wise more then half…” has an awkward conditional structure and unclear agreement. There are also problems with articles, plurals and punctuation, as in “the number starts” and the extended list of categories without clear sentence breaks. Practise writing shorter, complete sentences first, then combine them with accurate clauses and consistent past-tense reporting.

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