Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

This pie chart and bar chart shows the detailsrelated a public library that's called Little Chalfont.

First of all, Pie chart illustrats total loans by category in 2016 and also shows age of library members, it shows 22 children, 12 adults 65 and over, 15 youngh adults 13-17, also adults 18 to 64 are 51. Children's fiction 38% children's non-fgiction 6% young adults 2% adult non-fistion 13% and adult audio books 2%.

And the other hand, the bar chart illustrats the total number of loans below 2007 to 2016. In 2007 it is very low round bound 15,000 but after one year in 2008 it is 18,000, A few years ago in 2011 the counting of loan is 22,000, however, it will be decrese in 2013 and stop on 19,000 at the end in 2016 agin the total number of loans up and gop on 23,000 it is very high.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the three kinds of information and include some relevant figures, such as the member shares (51% adults aged 18–64 and 22% children) and the broad rise in loans over the period. However, the response only partially reports the charts: it omits several loan categories, including children’s DVDs and adult fiction, and gives no clear overview of the main patterns. Some figures and trends are inaccurate: loans were about 21,700 in 2016, not 23,000, and the 2013 figure was about 19,600 rather than 19,000. The description of the loan trend is also difficult to follow. To improve, select the key comparisons and report them accurately, including the overall increase and the dominance of fiction in the 2016 loan categories.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic sequence: it introduces the charts, discusses membership and loan categories, then turns to the yearly loan totals. This gives the reader some sense of how the information is organised. However, progression is not consistently clear, and the first paragraph combines several separate data points without grouping or comparison. Linking phrases such as “First of all” and “And the other hand” are either mechanical or used inaccurately, while the final sentence strings together several changes without clear connections. Use separate paragraphs for the membership/category information and the time series, and organise each around a main feature followed by supporting figures. Clearer references and transitions would make the report easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “total loans,” “library members,” “category,” and “decrease,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several spelling and word-choice errors make parts of the report difficult to understand, for example “illustrats,” “non-fgiction,” “youngh,” “decrese,” and “gop on.” Phrases such as “very low round bound” and “the counting of loan” are not natural ways to describe chart data. Aim for precise, conventional expressions such as “stood at approximately,” “the number of loans,” and “rose to.” Check spelling carefully and avoid informal or unclear wording when reporting figures and trends.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, but grammatical control is inconsistent. The opening has a subject–verb agreement error (“This pie chart and bar chart shows”), and “detailsrelated a public library” lacks a clear grammatical construction. In the trend description, tense and sentence structure become difficult to follow, particularly in “it will be decrese in 2013 and stop on 19,000 at the end in 2016.” Commas and capital letters are also used inconsistently, creating run-on sentences. These errors sometimes make the intended relationships between years and figures unclear. Practise accurate present-tense reporting structures, such as “Loans rose from … to …,” and divide longer descriptions into complete sentences with clear punctuation.

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