Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

There are two charts given giving necessary information about a public library in town called Little Chalfont . Overall the pie chart representating the age of library members in four categories as children, young adults, adults and members aged 65 and above, while the bar chart depicts total number of loans from 2007 to 2016.

Highest number of frequency is of adults aged 18-64 standing at 51%, young adults proportion is 15% and senior citizen members over 65 at 12%, sharing almost equal percentage. Children stands at 22%

On the one hand, loans were at the peak in the year 2016 showing a massive trend going above 20,000. Although it was around 15,000 in 2007 depicting the lowest value in the following years. Moreover it came equivalent between the years 2008 to 2009, still less than 20,000.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the charts and report several relevant figures, including the 51% share for adults aged 18–64, the 22% for children, and the rise in loans from about 15,700 in 2007 to over 20,000 in 2016. However, the response is incomplete: it does not describe the loan-category breakdown, and the trend account omits the later fluctuations and the overall pattern after 2010. The overview is also limited, and “peak” is not supported as a clear summary of the decade’s trend. The response is 13 words below the required minimum, which contributes to the underdevelopment. Cover all three visuals and state the main comparisons and trends more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic overall structure: an introduction, a brief account of membership ages, and a paragraph about loans. This gives the reader some sense of the information being discussed. However, progression is limited because the final paragraph stops after describing 2008–2009, without completing the decade’s trend or moving to the category data. Linking phrases such as “Overall,” “On the one hand,” and “Moreover” are used, but “On the one hand” suggests a contrast that is not developed. Organise the body into clear sections for membership, loan categories, and the time trend, and use transitions that show the actual relationship between points.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “proportion,” “depicts,” “peak,” and “total number of loans,” so the topic is generally clear. There are also attempts at more formal phrasing, such as “senior citizen members.” However, several expressions are inaccurate or unnatural: “Highest number of frequency,” “showing a massive trend,” and “came equivalent” do not communicate the intended comparisons precisely. “Representating” is also misspelled, and “necessary information” is an awkward description of the charts. Aim for standard data-reporting collocations such as “accounted for,” “reached,” “remained stable,” and “increased,” choosing words that describe the figures rather than adding emphasis.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including the opening sentence with “while” and the sentence beginning “Although.” Most of the intended meaning can be understood, but grammatical control is uneven. The opening has a faulty construction (“There are two charts given giving”) and an unnecessary space before the full stop. In “Children stands at 22%,” the subject and verb do not agree; “the pie chart representating” also contains an incorrect verb form. The sentence beginning “Although” is a fragment, and “it came equivalent” lacks a clear grammatical structure. Use complete sentences, check subject–verb agreement, and make sure subordinate clauses are attached to a main clause.

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