Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The pie chart illustrate about a public library usage of books about children choices about books .
In this graph the adults grab 51 percent of the total loan.22 percent portion occupied by children, 15 and 12 percent pie chart fill with adults and young adults respectively.As we discuss about the line graph it gives information about the loan in different years starting from 2007 to 2016.The highest amount of loan has been accumulated in the year of 2016.It has the same amount in 2015 and 2011.But the value has been decreased gradually in 2014,2010,2012.The trending of getting loan from library by the year of 2008 and 2009 and 2010.but the value has been very low in the year of 2013 and the is at it lowest point at the year of 2007 when the value of getting loan is reduced at 15000.The highest value is at 20000. it show the basic comparison between pie chart and and line graph.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
You identify the three chart types and report some relevant features, including the largest membership group (adults aged 18–64, 51%) and the low point in loans in 2007. However, the response addresses the task only partially: it gives no account of the loan-category breakdown, and the overview of the decade’s trend is unclear. Several details are inaccurate or confusing. For example, the 22% figure is children, not “the total loan,” and the 15% and 12% figures refer to young adults and adults aged 65 and over, respectively. The line graph peaks in 2016, but 2015 and 2011 are not equal, and the maximum is about 21,700 rather than 20,000. Select the main patterns and report them accurately.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
There is a basic attempt to move from the membership chart to the line graph, signalled by “As we discuss about the line graph,” and the response generally follows the order of the visuals. However, ideas are not arranged into clear paragraphs or a consistent overview-and-details structure, so the reader has to work to follow the comparisons. The sequence “decreased gradually in 2014, 2010, 2012” is especially confusing because the years are not presented chronologically and the trend is not explained. Linking phrases such as “but” and “as we discuss” are repetitive or do not clarify the relationship between points. Group the charts into paragraphs and describe the loan trend in chronological order.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “line graph,” “pie chart,” “highest,” “lowest point,” and “comparison,” so the topic is recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the meaning difficult to interpret. “Adults grab 51 percent” is unsuitable for describing a chart, while “pie chart fill with adults” and “amount of loan has been accumulated” are unnatural. The response also repeats “value” and “loan” without much variation. Use precise terms such as “accounted for,” “share,” “number of loans,” and “rose/fell,” ensuring that each label matches the data. This would make the description clearer and more appropriately academic.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response attempts both short statements and longer sentences, and the reader can identify the general subject of most points. However, grammatical errors are frequent and sometimes obscure relationships between ideas. For example, “The pie chart illustrate” has subject–verb disagreement, and “The trending of getting loan … but the value has been very low” is not a complete, well-formed sentence. Articles and sentence boundaries are also inconsistent, as in “at it lowest point at the year of 2007.” Some tense and structure choices are awkward, including “As we discuss about.” Practise accurate simple sentences first, then connect them with clear clauses; check agreement, articles, and punctuation when editing.
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