Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-31
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The Chart illustrates data of a oublic library in town know as Little Chalfont, where there is pie chart for showing different age groups and a table describing types of loans given in the year 2016 as well as a bar chart showing numbers loans given during 2007 to 2016.
Firstly, the pie chart depict that 51% members of the library are adults where as 22% are children and remaining are young adults and adults over 65 which is 15% and 12% respectively. To add on the table displays and categorys for loans where highest of 38% is given for children's fiction where as the lowest 1% is given for children's DVDs.
Adding on, the bar chart compares the toal number of loans given over year 2007 to 2016 where from 2010 to 2016 the number of loans where more than 20,000 except in 2013 where it was less than that moreover from year 2007 to 2009 the loans range from 15,000 to 20,000.
To conclude, a key trend is seen in the numbers of loans from year 2010 whereas adults are the frequent membres of the library.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
You identify the three visual elements and report several relevant figures, including the 51% adult membership share and the 38% and 1% loan-category extremes. You also capture the broad pattern that loans rose overall and were generally above 20,000 in the later years. However, the overview is not sufficiently clear or complete: the conclusion mentions adults as frequent members but does not summarise the loan trend accurately, and the opening mainly describes the charts rather than their key messages. Some details are imprecise: 2010–2016 includes 2013 below 20,000, but 2012 is also above 20,000; the account would be stronger if it highlighted the rise from 15,700 to 21,700 and the fluctuations. Compare the two largest loan categories, both at 38%, rather than only naming the highest and lowest.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0
The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, separate discussion of the membership and loan categories, a paragraph on the time series, and a concluding sentence. This gives the reader a coherent overall route through the visuals. Linking expressions such as “Firstly,” “To add on,” and “To conclude” help signal movement, although some are repetitive or do not express the relationship precisely. The second paragraph combines the age figures and loan categories without a clear transition, while the final sentence introduces a trend without explaining it. Improve progression by grouping related information, using a distinct overview after the introduction, and connecting comparisons directly to the figures they summarise.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
You use relevant task vocabulary, including “age groups,” “categories,” “loans,” and “frequent members,” and the reader can generally understand the intended comparisons. However, the range and precision are uneven, with repeated general wording such as “given” and “number of loans.” Several spelling and word-form errors are noticeable, including “oublic,” “categorys,” “toal,” and “membres,” which reduce the accuracy of the report. Some collocations are also unnatural: “a table describing types of loans given” and “the loans range from” are less suitable than language describing the proportions or totals recorded. Use precise reporting verbs and terms such as “accounted for,” “stood at,” and “loan volume” to make comparisons clearer and more academic.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, and the main information is usually understandable. However, control is inconsistent, particularly in longer sentences joined by several clauses. For example, “where from 2010 to 2016 the number of loans where more than 20,000” has an incorrect verb form and an awkward clause structure; “the pie chart depict” also has subject–verb disagreement. Articles and sentence boundaries need attention in phrases such as “in town know as” and in the long sentence beginning “Adding on, the bar chart compares…”. Aim for shorter, accurately punctuated comparisons, while practising agreement (“depicts,” “was”) and consistent past-tense reporting of the 2016 data.
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