Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The charts provide informations of percentage's library members according to their age and loans category over the years of a public library in a town.

Overall, above half of total library's members lie in the age of 18-64. Children's fiction and adult fiction have highest percentage loan category, and number of loan increases over the year with some fluctuations.

In 2016, adults having age 18-64 contibuted above half of total percentage of library members. While childrens were less than a quarter and young adults of age 13-17 contributed only 15%. The lowest number of library members were aduts having age 65 and above which contribute 12% of total.

Total loan was categoried regarding to the percentage material. Highest loan was categoried for children's fiction and adult fiction which was 38% of total. After that adult non-fiction was 13% and the lowest loan was categoried for children's DVDs. In 2007, number of loan was near about 16,000 which increased over time and reached high vale in 2011 which was nearly 21,000 before fluctuation. During fluctuation, it steep down to nearly 19,000 in 2013. After that fluctuation the loan rises to highest number of approximately 22,000 in 2016.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover all three visuals and identify the main patterns: adults aged 18–64 form the largest membership group, fiction accounts for the largest loan shares, and total loans rise overall despite fluctuations. The figures you report are generally consistent with the chart, including the 2011 peak and the later dip to about 19,000 in 2013. Some details are less fully reported: the children’s membership share is 22%, rather than simply “less than a quarter,” and the 2% and 6% loan categories are not all described. Also, the overview says loans increase “over the year,” which is imprecise for a ten-year period. More precise comparisons and a clearer account of the overall trend would strengthen the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, an overview, and separate discussion of membership, loan categories, and the time series. This makes the three visuals easy to follow, and sequencing phrases such as “After that” and “In 2007” help guide the reader. However, some links are mechanical or unclear. For example, “After that fluctuation the loan rises” does not clearly identify which fluctuation is meant, and “During fluctuation” is vague. The long final paragraph also combines category shares with the decade-long trend, so clearer separation would improve progression. Use more precise references and transitions, and keep each paragraph focused on one chart or closely related comparison.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentage,” “contributed,” “highest,” “lowest,” and “fluctuation,” so the main information is usually understandable. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or repetitive, which limits precision: “informations,” “percentage’s library members,” “loan was categoried,” and “steep down” are not natural expressions in this context. There are also spelling errors such as “contibuted,” “aduts,” and “vale.” Aim for standard reporting phrases such as “the proportion of members,” “loans by category,” and “fell to,” and check spelling carefully. A broader, more accurate range of chart-related vocabulary would make the comparisons clearer and more fluent.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and more complex forms, including the overview sentence joined with “and” and the contrast beginning “While children…”. The main message remains understandable, but some grammatical errors recur. For example, “number of loan increases” has a number and agreement problem, while “adults having age 18-64 contributed” uses an awkward clause structure. Articles and possessives are also inconsistent in phrases such as “total library’s members” and “the lowest number of library members were.” The sentence beginning “While” is a fragment because it is not joined to a main clause. Practise complete sentence structures, singular/plural agreement, and article use; these corrections would improve accuracy while preserving your attempts at complex sentences.

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