Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie chart illustates the age of library members, while shows the data of total loans taken on different category of books in 2016, whereas bar chart depicts the total number of loans taken from 2007 to 2016 by public library in a town called Little Chalfont. Overall it is clear that, adults aged 18-64 are more intrested compared to other age group. The highest loan had taken on children's as well as adul fiction books and the lowest loans accounted 2% on young adults book and the highest loans recorded in 2016.

In 2016, adults accounted 51% which recorded the highest number of library member followed by children 22 after than young adults 13-17 about 15 and adults 65 and over were 12.

In 2016, loans on children fiction and adult fiction were recorded 38%, where as children non-fiction and adult non-fiction acoounted 6% and 13% respectively, the lowest loan taken on young adults adult fiction and adult audio book about 1%,2% and 2% respecively.

In 2017, total loan just above 15,000 which increased significantly to just above the 20,000 in year 2010 and it stood same to year 2012. In 2013 it fell to approximetly 19000, loans increased marginally from 2014 to 2016.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover all three visuals and identify several important features: adults aged 18–64 form the largest membership group, fiction accounts for the largest loan shares, and loans generally rise over the period. This supports a clear overview, and the response includes relevant figures. However, some details are inaccurate or unclear: the lowest category is children’s DVDs at 1%, not the young-adult category, and the chart ends in 2016, not 2017. The statement that loans “stood same to year 2012” also obscures the fluctuations between 2010 and 2012. To strengthen the response further, report the overall loan trend more precisely, including the peak in 2016, and distinguish the category percentages accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction and overview are followed by paragraphs on membership, loan categories and the time series. This makes the information broadly easy to locate. However, progression within some sentences is less clear, particularly in the opening, where “while shows” and “whereas” make the relationships between the visuals difficult to follow. The overview also combines several points without a clear hierarchy, and the final paragraph moves through years in a way that leaves the trend imprecise. Use one clear topic sentence for each visual, then group related comparisons and connect them with accurate transitions such as “by contrast” or “after a slight decline.” Clearer referencing would also help readers follow which figures belong to which chart.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “accounted,” “followed by,” “increased,” and “fell,” and terms such as “non-fiction” and “audio book” help identify categories. However, word choice and collocation are often inaccurate or repetitive, as in “loans taken on,” “the highest loan had taken,” and “the lowest loan taken.” Several spelling errors—“illustates,” “intrested,” “acoounted,” and “respecively”—also reduce precision. Some phrases are difficult to interpret, including “the highest loans recorded in 2016,” which does not clearly state that the total reached its peak then. Aim for standard reporting expressions such as “the proportion of loans,” “accounted for,” and “the total number of loans peaked,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a comparison in the opening and several sentences with time clauses. However, control is uneven, and errors sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to understand. For example, “while shows” lacks a subject, “the highest loan had taken” has an incorrect verb construction, and “which increased significantly” does not clearly refer to the total number of loans. There are also problems with articles, plurals and sentence boundaries, such as “the highest number of library member” and the long opening sentence joining several chart descriptions. Build shorter, complete sentences first, then add subordinate clauses only when their subject and reference are clear. Check verb forms and agreement in each sentence.

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