Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Little Chalfont Library has illustarte three information: age of library members, total loans by category, and total number of loans.The Data is plotted in 2016 for the first two information and through out the years from 2007 to 2016 for the last information.

Firstly, the pie chart shows library's members age of four categories. showing that, half of it is for adults of age ranged from 18 to 64;Futhermore, children occupy 22 percent, while young adults and adults 65 and over are nearly equally split with 15% and 12% respectively.

Secondly, Total loans by category table shows the highest percentage of loans are the same for adult fiction and children's fiction with 38%, while the least is for childrens DVDs with 1%; Also,young adults and adult audio books would be considered the same with 2% of the total loans. Lastly, for total number of loans it shows sligh flactuation.That overall lead to increase of loans from about 16,000 in 2007 to nearly 21,000 in 2016.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover all three visuals and identify several important features accurately: adults aged 18–64 form the largest membership group, adult and children’s fiction each account for 38% of loans, and children’s DVDs are the smallest category. The overview of loan totals also correctly notes an overall rise from 2007 to 2016. This meets the task well, but some details are less fully reported. For example, the membership figures are percentages, yet the response does not explicitly identify them as such, and the loan trend is described only as a “slight fluctuation” rather than showing its rise to a peak, subsequent dip, and recovery. More precise comparisons and a fuller account of the line graph would strengthen the summary.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction followed by discussion of the membership chart, the loan-category table, and the trend graph. Sequencing phrases such as “Firstly,” “Secondly,” and “Lastly” help readers follow the order of the visuals, and the main points are generally easy to locate. However, the linking is somewhat mechanical, and the final section is compressed into one sentence that combines the fluctuation and overall increase without explaining the stages. Some punctuation also interrupts the flow, particularly the run-on spacing in “loans.The Data” and the awkward transition “showing that.” To improve, use smoother links between comparisons and give the trend its own clearly developed sentence or paragraph.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for describing charts, including “percentage,” “occupy,” “equally split,” “fluctuation,” and “increase,” so the meaning is usually recoverable. There are also attempts at more formal reporting language. However, several spelling errors and imprecise or unnatural choices limit the range and control: “illustarte,” “Futhermore,” “sligh,” and “flactuation” are noticeable, while “three information” and “the first two information” are not natural expressions. “Nearly equally split” is also less precise than a direct comparison. Aim for accurate chart-reporting collocations and proofread spelling; this will make the vocabulary more dependable and the comparisons clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mixture of sentence forms, including clauses introduced by “while” and “that,” and the main comparisons can generally be understood. However, control is inconsistent, with several errors in sentence boundaries, articles, agreement, and clause construction. For instance, “The Data is plotted” has an awkward subject and verb pattern, while “Firstly, the pie chart shows library's members age of four categories. showing that” creates a fragment after the full stop. The sentence beginning “Lastly, for total number of loans it shows” also has an unclear subject and missing article. Punctuation and spacing around semicolons and full stops need attention. Practise building complete sentences with clear subjects, and check articles and agreement during revision.

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