Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-02
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The above pie chart gives the information about the proportion of members age in Little Chalfont Library and the table illustrates the total percentage of loan taken by different category members.While the bar chart shows number of loans taken by member from year 2007 to 2016.
Overall the share of Adults as the member of library is very high and The Childrens fiction and Adult fiction has the highest share in loans.While the total number of loans had a slight fluctuation.
The Adult members of the library shows more interest as the share is 51% folowed by childeren.While the Young adults and Adults who are over 65 years has very less interest.More than half of the loans are with Childrens fiction and Adult fiction.Second most share of loan is with Adult non-fiction and all others share around 10% in total.
The total loans which were took by the members of the library in the year 2007 were around 15000 which has gradually escalate till 2011 with around 21000 then after slightly dwindle till 2013.By the ear of the year it came back to 22000 loans.That means this chart e
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0
You identify the main patterns: adults aged 18–64 form the largest membership group, fiction accounts for the largest loan shares, and total loans fluctuate over time. You also report several relevant figures, including 51% for adults and about 21,000 loans in 2011. However, some details are inaccurate or unclear: children account for 22%, not the next-largest group after adults (young adults are 15% and those aged 65+ are 12%); adult non-fiction is 13%, while the remaining categories together make up 11%, not “around 10%” each. The final sentence is unfinished, and the overview could describe the overall rise from 2007 to 2016 more clearly. Select and compare key figures more precisely to strengthen coverage.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overview and separate paragraphs for membership/loan categories and the trend over time. This gives the reader a basic route through the information. However, progression is weakened by unclear links and abrupt phrasing. For example, “all others share around 10% in total” does not clearly distinguish the smaller categories, and the final line, “That means this chart e”, breaks off before completing the point. Some transitions, such as “While” at the start of the overview, do not connect ideas smoothly. Use clearer topic sentences and link each comparison explicitly; ensure the final paragraph ends with a complete summary of the trend.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “proportion”, “share”, “fluctuation” and “gradually”, and you attempt to describe change with “escalate” and “dwindle”. However, several choices are inaccurate or unnatural for chart reporting: “interest” suggests preference rather than membership, “loans taken by member” is awkward, and “share of loan” is imprecise. Spelling errors such as “folowed”, “childeren” and “dwindle” (used as a verb form without an appropriate ending) also reduce control. Aim for precise terms such as “accounted for”, “represented” and “the number of loans rose/fell”. This would make the descriptions clearer and more natural.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including the contrastive opening with “While” and the sequence describing loans from 2007 to 2013. However, grammatical errors are frequent enough to make some sentences difficult to follow. Examples include “the share of Adults as the member … is very high”, where the noun phrase and agreement are faulty, and “The Adult members … shows”, where the plural subject requires a plural verb. The sentence beginning “The total loans which were took” also has an incorrect passive verb form, while “By the ear of the year” is structurally unclear. Punctuation spacing and missing sentence boundaries add to the difficulty. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, past-tense forms and complete sentence construction.
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