Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The chart provide information about the age distribution of members, the categories of books borrowed and the total number of loans at Little Chalfont Library between 2007 and 2017.

Overall, the largest proportion of age is adults 18-64 in this chart while, the toal loan category had children's fiction and adult fiction as the largest proportion. While the total loans increased by years.

Firstly, age of library members had largest proportion of 18-64 accounted for 51% while, the smallest portion being at 13% of age 13-17 young adults. Moreover 22% accounted for children while, 15% for adults 65 and over in library members in 2016.

Secondly, total loans had the largest proposrtion of 38% in two category's adult fiction and children's fiction. While, lowest proportion accounted for 1% in children's dvd following with 6% in children's non fiction and other two smaller portion accounted for 2% both of adult audio books and young adults category loans in library 2016.

Lastly, total number of loans starting at 16,000 in 2007 to reaching over 21,500 in 2011 to getting slightly lower at 19,500 in 2013. Lastly growing at 22,000 in 2016 being the highest in the chart for total number of loans in Little Chalfont Library.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover all three visuals and identify the main patterns: adults aged 18–64 form the largest membership group, fiction leads the loan categories, and total loans rise overall. The comparison of the two 38% categories and the low share for children’s DVDs is relevant. Some details, however, are misreported: the age figures for young adults and people aged 65+ are reversed (15% and 12%, respectively), and the loan series ends in 2016, not 2017. The trend description also says loans reached over 21,500 in 2011, although the peak occurs in 2016; 2013 is a dip, followed by recovery. More precise reporting of these figures and a clearer overview of the fluctuations would strengthen the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for membership, loan categories, and the time series. This makes the three visuals easy to follow. However, progression within sentences is sometimes disrupted by repeated or awkward linking, especially the frequent use of “while” to join incomplete or loosely related clauses. “Lastly” is also used twice in the final paragraph, and the sequence of figures there is difficult to track. Use connectors to show precise relationships, and build each paragraph around a clear comparison or trend. The organisation is sound, but cohesion is not yet consistently smooth or flexible.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “age distribution,” “largest proportion,” “categories,” and “total number of loans,” so the reader can understand the subject. However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or repetitive. “The largest proportion of age” is not a natural collocation; “the largest age group” would be clearer. “Total loan category” and “proposrtion” also weaken precision, while “books borrowed” does not accurately cover DVDs and audiobooks. Spelling errors such as “toal” and “proposrtion,” plus inconsistent forms such as “children's dvd,” are noticeable. Aim for accurate chart language such as “share,” “accounted for,” and “loan volume,” while checking spelling and category labels.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, and the response is generally understandable. However, control is uneven: several sentences contain faulty clause connections or agreement. For example, “The chart provide” needs subject–verb agreement, and “the largest proportion of age is adults” has an unclear grammatical structure. In “While the total loans increased by years,” the subordinate clause is left without a main clause. The repeated pattern “While, …” also creates punctuation and sentence-boundary problems. There are some tense and article issues, and the final paragraph strings several stages together without clear grammatical links. Practise complete sentences with accurate subjects and verbs, and use complex clauses only when their relationship is clear.

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