Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
"The pie chart illustrates the different percentages of total loans by category.Initally,The pie
chart shows the different loans by category in 2016.The children's non-fiction was higher
approximately 6%than Children's DVDs which was 1%.The Young adults was lower than
adult fiction.And the adult fiction which was higher 38%as compares to Adult non-fiction
aprroxiametly 13%.And adult non-fiction was higher 13%as compared to Adult audio books
2%.Overall,the chart shows that at age of library members continue to children's fiction were
remained same 38%.And the children fiction continue were not dominated to any other loans
category."
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0
The response identifies some figures from the category chart, including 6% for children’s non-fiction, 1% for children’s DVDs, 38% for adult fiction and 13% for adult non-fiction. However, it does not adequately summarise the full set of charts: the membership age profile and the 2007–2016 loan trend are omitted, and there is no clear overview of the main features. The statement that children’s fiction “remained same 38%” is not supported by the charts, which show a single-year category share, not a change over time. The response is also 58 words below the required minimum, limiting the detail it can provide. To improve, report the largest and smallest categories, compare the age groups, and describe the overall loan trend using accurate data.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
There is a basic attempt to organise the response around the category chart, and some comparisons are signalled with “than” and “as compared to.” However, the ideas do not progress clearly: the opening repeats that the pie chart shows loan categories, while the final sentences introduce library-member ages and make an unclear claim about children’s fiction. The repeated use of “And” to begin statements, together with inconsistent spacing and punctuation, makes the sequence harder to follow. Group related comparisons into a clear paragraph and use a separate overview to summarise the main patterns across all the charts. More precise referencing would also help readers understand which category or chart each statement concerns.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The response uses some relevant chart vocabulary, such as “percentages,” “total loans,” “category,” and “compared to,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is narrow and several phrases are inaccurate or awkward, including “the different loans by category,” “at age of library members,” and “were remained same.” Repetition of “higher” and “lower” also limits the precision of the comparisons. Spelling errors such as “Initally” and “aprroxiametly” further reduce clarity. Build a more varied set of accurate terms for describing proportions and trends, and check spelling carefully. For example, distinguish a category’s “share of loans” from the “proportion of members” in an age group.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The response attempts to connect ideas in longer sentences, but control is inconsistent and sentence structures are often incomplete or awkward. For example, “The children’s non-fiction was higher approximately 6% than Children’s DVDs which was 1%” lacks a clear grammatical comparison, while “the adult fiction which was higher 38% as compares to Adult non-fiction” has faulty clause structure and verb form. The final sentence, “children fiction continue were not dominated,” is difficult to interpret because its subject and verb do not agree and the tense is unclear. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after full stops and commas. Use straightforward comparative sentences with accurate forms, such as “Children’s non-fiction accounted for 6%, compared with 1% for DVDs.”
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