Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

the given pie chart illustrates the different age of library members while the provided table shows the category of total loan consumption in 2016 and the given bar graph comprise the total number of loans between 2007 and 2016.

overall,the adults (18-64) provide more percentage and also children less than adults(18-64) while others contribute less than these while in category of loans children's fiction and adult fiction contribute more and children's dvd's and,young adults and adult audio books contribute very few and number of loans in 2016 was more than others.

firstly,adults between

the ages of 18-64 contribute more about 51%,children also about twenty two percent,young adults(13-17) was 15 percent and adults (65 and over) contributed about 12%.

secondly,total loans by children's fiction and adut fiction contribute 38%,adult non fiction,children's non fiction contribute less than 15 percent while young adults and adult audio books were 2 percent and children's dvd's was only 1% in 2016.

lastly,total number of loans in 2016 was more about 22000,also roughly 21000 in 2011 and 2015,in 2010,2012,2014 was about approximately more than 20000.in 2007 to 2009 very few fluctuations were proceded.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover all three visuals and identify several important features: adults aged 18–64 are the largest membership group, fiction accounts for the biggest loan shares, and loans rise overall across the period. Most figures are accurately reported, including the age percentages and the two 38% fiction categories. The overview also attempts to compare the charts, which is useful. However, some details are unclear or imprecise: “children's fiction and adult fiction contribute 38%” could mean 38% combined, rather than 38% each, and “in 2007 to 2009 very few fluctuations” misses the clear rise from about 15,700 to 19,000 followed by stability. To strengthen the response, state the main trend more precisely and make each comparison unambiguous.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, an overview, and paragraphs covering membership, loan categories, and the time series. Sequencing words such as “firstly,” “secondly,” and “lastly” help readers follow the order. However, cohesion is sometimes mechanical, and several ideas are joined in long strings with commas, especially in the overview and final paragraph. The opening overview also combines several comparisons without clearly separating them, while “number of loans in 2016 was more than others” is not a precise reference. Use clearer sentence boundaries and group related information—for example, describe the membership and category charts together, then explain the loan trend with its rise, fluctuations, and final peak.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “age of library members,” “total loans,” “category,” and “contribute,” so the topic is generally clear. There is some range in how you describe proportions, such as “about,” “roughly,” and “only.” However, several choices are inaccurate or unnatural for chart reporting: “loan consumption” is not an appropriate collocation, “provide more percentage” is unclear, and “very few fluctuations were proceded” does not express the trend correctly. Spelling and form errors such as “adut” and “dvd's” also reduce precision. Aim for standard reporting phrases such as “accounted for,” “stood at,” and “fluctuated,” and check spelling and apostrophe use.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, and the reader can usually understand the intended comparisons. However, control is inconsistent: “the adults (18-64) provide more percentage” has an unsuitable verb pattern, while “young adults (13-17) was 15 percent” has a subject–verb agreement error. The opening sentence also has a long, loosely joined structure, and punctuation is often missing after introductory words and around clauses. Tense and number choices need more consistent control when describing the 2016 figures and the historical trend. Practise building shorter, complete sentences first, then combine them with accurate clauses—for example, “Adults aged 18–64 made up 51% of members, whereas the over-65s accounted for 12%.”

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