Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The charts present the information on goverenment library in a town known as Little Chalfont.

Overall, adults are the highest number of member in library and had higher loan on Children's fiction and Adult fiction sectors. Finally had the highest loan in 2016.

Moreover, the highest member in library was adults age group (18- 64) contribute 51 percent in chart, followed by children with 22 percent. Young adults (13-17) had 15 percent and at last adults above 65 had only 12 percent.

However, library had invest money in different sector with loans. The highest loan of 38 percent for childerns fiction and adult fiction. Adult non fiction, childerns non fiction and young adults had the less loans 13 , 6, 2 percent respectively. finally Adults audio books and Childerns DVDs had 2,1 percent loans. The highest loan was recorded in 2016 year (22,000) and the lowest was in 2007 (16,000). The flucuation of loan was recorded, which shows increased in 2008 decrease in 2009 and again increased until 2012 then decreased in 2013 and continuse increased till 2016.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover the three visuals and identify several important features: adults aged 18–64 form the largest membership group, fiction accounts for the largest loan shares, and loans are highest near the end of the period. Most category percentages and membership figures are reported accurately. However, the overview is unclear (“Finally had the highest loan in 2016”), and the trend description misreads the data: loans rose from 2008 to 2009, rather than decreasing, and the overall pattern is a rise from about 15,700 to 21,700 with fluctuations. The stated 2016 and 2007 totals are reasonable approximations, but the overview should clearly summarise the main trend and comparisons. Develop the time-series description more precisely and avoid unsupported wording such as the library having “invest[ed] money.”

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate discussion of membership, loan categories, and yearly totals. This gives the reader a basic route through the information. However, progression is weakened by abrupt or unclear links, especially “Finally had the highest loan in 2016,” which does not clearly connect to the preceding overview. “Moreover” and “However” do not express the relationships between the points that follow, and the final paragraph combines category shares with the time trend without a clear transition. Organise the body into distinct comparisons and use linking phrases only when their meaning fits. Clearer referencing and a more deliberate sequence would make the report easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “member,” “loan,” “fiction,” “non-fiction,” “highest,” and “fluctuation,” so the topic is generally clear. There is also some attempt to vary phrasing, such as “recorded” and “contribute.” However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward: “invest money in different sector with loans” does not describe the chart, and “the highest member” should refer to the largest membership group. Spelling errors such as “goverenment,” “childerns,” and “flucuation” are noticeable, while repeated use of “highest” and “loan” limits precision. Choose standard chart-reporting expressions and check spelling, especially for key terms and category labels.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including a sentence describing the sequence of changes from 2008 to 2016. However, grammatical control is inconsistent. For example, “adults are the highest number of member” has faulty agreement and sentence structure, while “Young adults … had 15 percent” needs a clearer subject such as “accounted for.” The overview fragment “Finally had the highest loan in 2016” lacks a subject, and “which shows increased” is not a well-formed clause. Articles, plurals, and verb forms also need attention. Aim first for accurate complete sentences, then use a few controlled complex structures to connect comparisons and trends.

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