Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Pie chart illustrate information about Little Chalfont Library in which pie chart demonstrate various group of member ranging from children, adults which are (18-64), young adults (13-17) and adults more than 65 and over.

To bein with in chart, highest portion represents adult of 51 to 64 and lowest one protion shows young adults. There is a table along with chart which give information about total loans by category in year 2016. On top percentage there are children`s fiction and adult fiction which are 38% and lowest percentage has been shown in Children`s DVDs which is 1%.

Moreover, there is a bar graph at bottom which gives infromation about total number of loans from year 2007 to 2016. In x-axis there are number of years starting form 2007 to 2016 and in y-axis there is a number of loans from 0 to 25,000. Rise in loans observe in 2016 by round off 22,000 and decline in loans showed in 2007 by year 2007.

In conclusion, overall picture shows information of library by giving different information in pie chart, table and bar graph. Which covers the age of library member along with number of loans by people observed in varioys years.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify all three visual elements and report some relevant headline details, including the two largest loan categories (children’s and adult fiction, both 38%) and the approximate peak in loans in 2016. However, the account is only partly developed: the age figures are not reported accurately, since 51% refers to adults aged 18–64, not “adult of 51 to 64,” and you call young adults the smallest group even though adults aged 65 and over are 12%, compared with 15% for young adults. The loan trend is also oversimplified: 2007 is the low point, but loans generally rise and fluctuate, rather than simply showing a rise in 2016. Include a clear overview and compare the main changes and proportions more precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable sequence: it introduces the charts, discusses membership and loan categories, then turns to the bar graph and ends with a conclusion. Paragraphing helps separate these topics, and linking expressions such as “Moreover” make the shift to the final chart clear. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear, and the conclusion largely repeats that the visuals show library information rather than summarising the main findings. Phrases such as “To begin with in chart” and “In conclusion, overall picture” are awkward, while “Which covers…” is an incomplete follow-on sentence. Use a concise overview after the introduction, then organise the details by chart with clear comparisons and references.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “percentage,” “total loans,” “x-axis,” and “bar graph,” so the reader can generally identify the subject of each section. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or repetitive. For example, “highest portion” and “lowest percentage has been shown” are less precise than describing the largest and smallest shares, while “Rise in loans observe” does not express the trend naturally. There are also spelling errors such as “infromation,” “varioys,” and “protion,” which reduce clarity and control. Build a more precise set of trend and comparison terms, and check spelling and word forms before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts some longer sentence forms, for example, “Moreover, there is a bar graph at bottom which gives information…,” but control is inconsistent and the range remains limited. Errors in agreement and verb forms occur in “Pie chart illustrate” and “Rise in loans observe,” while articles and sentence construction are also problematic in “in chart” and “There is a table along with chart which give information.” The final fragment, “Which covers the age…,” is not a complete sentence, and the opening sentence is difficult to follow because several ideas are joined without clear grammatical structure. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then add subordinate clauses while checking subject–verb agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries.

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