Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The chart displays data about a public library in the town in 2016. There are four main categories. Firstly, there are 22% teenagers, Secondly 51% are adults, thirdly 15% are young adults and finally 12% are senior citizens.

Moreover, The table presents proportionality of loan categories. Whereas, children's fiction and adilt fiction has the same percentage. Children's DVDs has the lowest which is only 1%.

Furthermore, bar chart presents data about the total number of loans from 2007 to 2016. In 2007, the loan amount was about 16000 which gradually increses until 2011 and becomes nearly 22000. After this there is a little decline in 2013 and the loan amount remains 19000 only. Lastly it reached 22000 in 2016 which is the highest in all the years. The minimum amount of loan was in 2007.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You cover all three visuals and identify several relevant features, including the equal 38% shares for children’s and adult fiction, the 1% share for children’s DVDs, and the overall rise in loans. However, the response is under-developed and does not give a clear overview of the main patterns across the charts. The membership figures are mislabelled: 22% refers to children, not teenagers, while young adults account for 15%. The loan trend is also imprecise: it peaks at about 21,700 in 2016, and the 2013 figure is around 19,600 rather than 19,000. The response contains 135 words, below the required 150. Add a concise overview and report the key comparisons more accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a coherent overall arrangement: it moves from membership to loan categories and then to the time-series chart, with each visual given its own paragraph. Sequencing words such as “Moreover” and “Furthermore” help signal these shifts, and the reader can generally follow the information. To make the progression more natural, use a clear introductory overview before the details and avoid relying on a string of formulaic transitions. “Whereas” is not used to connect a complete contrast here, and the capitalisation after “Moreover” is distracting. Within the final paragraph, group the rise, subsequent fluctuations and final peak into a more clearly connected account. These refinements would make cohesion less mechanical and improve the flow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a relevant range of basic chart vocabulary, including “categories,” “percentage,” “decline” and “highest,” so the main information is usually understandable. However, some choices are imprecise or unnatural for describing data: “loan amount” suggests money rather than the number of loans, and “presents proportionality of loan categories” is awkward. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “adilt” and “increses,” and “teenagers” does not accurately name the children category. Aim for precise terms such as “share,” “proportion” and “number of loans,” and check spelling carefully. More accurate collocations would make the report clearer and more appropriate to an academic chart summary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

Most of your sentences communicate a basic comparison or trend, and you attempt some variation through sequencing and contrast. However, the range is limited, with many short, simple statements, and several grammatical errors remain. For example, “children’s fiction and adilt fiction has” has a plural subject but a singular verb; “Children’s DVDs has” has the same agreement problem. The sentence beginning “Whereas” is a fragment, and “the loan amount remains 19000 only” uses an awkward tense shift within a past-period report. Punctuation also needs attention, as in “Firstly … Secondly,” where the comma and capitalisation are inconsistent. Practise combining accurate clauses and maintaining past tense when describing the historical data.

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