Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The pie chart describes four different categories of people regarding age which arepublic library members in 2016 at little chalfont. Where as bar grapgh shows the amount of loan taken in twelve years.

An overall veiw illustrates that adults from 18-64 have highst percentage of membership as compared to adults 65 and over which have lowest mebership. And the loan in year 2007 was smaller as compred to the loan in 2016 which was bigger.

The pie chart explains that adults from 18-64 has highest pecentage of membership which is 51% means more than all other memberships followed by children which has pecentage of 22. However less percentages were of children and adults 65 and over which are 15% and 12% respectively.

The bar grapgh shows that less than 20,000 loan was taken in first three years from [redacted phone] and more than 20,000 was taken in next three consecutive years from [redacted phone]. Again there was decrease in amount of loan in 2013 which was less than 20,000. Thereafter, the loan amount again rise and cross 20,000 in next three consecutive years from [redacted phone].

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main age-group pattern and the broad rise in loans, and you include relevant figures such as 51% for adults aged 18–64 and the lower total in 2007 than in 2016. However, some key details are misreported: the membership figures for children and young adults are reversed (children are 22%, while young adults are 15%), and the lowest membership share is adults aged 65 and over, at 12%. The loan description also groups years inaccurately: 2009 is about 19,000, not above 20,000, and 2013 is followed by increases in 2014–2016. The overview is present but limited; include the overall stability of loans after their initial rise and the dominance of fiction in the 2016 loan categories.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear four-paragraph structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate descriptions of the membership and loan information. This gives the reader a generally coherent route through the charts. Linking expressions such as “However,” “Thereafter,” and “Again” help signal contrast and sequence. At times, though, the progression is mechanical, with repeated openings such as “The pie chart…” and “The bar graph…”. Some references are also unclear: “less percentages were of children and adults 65 and over” does not clearly identify which figure belongs to which group, especially after the earlier figures are reversed. Group the data more precisely and use comparisons to connect related points rather than relying mainly on time-sequence markers.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentage of membership,” “amount of loan,” “decrease,” and “consecutive years,” so the topic is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, such as “loan taken” and “loan amount…rise,” where “loans issued” or “the number of loans increased” would be more natural. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “grapgh,” “veiw,” “pecentage,” and “mebership,” which reduce the accuracy and polish of the report. “Highst” and “smaller…bigger” are also imprecise. Aim for accurate chart terms and check spelling carefully; use “share,” “proportion,” and “total loans” where appropriate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mixture of simple and more complex sentences, including comparisons with “as compared to” and a relative clause in “which was less than 20,000.” Most of the intended meaning can be followed, but some grammatical errors recur. For example, “adults from 18-64 has” should use a plural verb, while “the loan amount again rise” needs a past-tense verb. The opening sentence also lacks a clear grammatical structure (“which are public library members”), and “Where as” is incorrectly separated and does not form a complete sentence here. Articles and number agreement need attention in phrases such as “less than 20,000 loan.” Practise building accurate comparison sentences and checking subject–verb agreement and tense consistency.

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