Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

the charts give data about public library in town known as little chalfont pie chart shows ages of members and table highlights total number of loan

first of all, a massive participants of library consist on adults between 18-64 51% then children on second place 22% of total members 12% are young adults near 13-17 and at last old ager which are above 65 year old

the loans category in the (2016) higest percentage of loan taken for children,s fiction and adult novel which makes 38% of total secondly, children,s non-fiction 13% the other types have low percentage

the total number of loan grabbed in different years ([redacted phone]) here are four years which are above the 20,000 its 2010,11,12,14,15,and 2016 this time period highest in table and on last number first year 2007 which hardly cross 15,000 the year 2013 almost touch the digits of 20,000 anyone in this table can not achieve the maximum numbers of loans

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You cover all three visuals and identify the main membership group: adults aged 18–64 at 51%. You also note that children’s fiction and adult fiction each account for 38% of loans, and that borrowing generally rises from 2007 to 2016. However, several details are inaccurate or unclear: the 15% figure belongs to young adults, while people aged 65 and over make up 12%; children’s non-fiction is 6%, not 13%. The trend description also says there are four years above 20,000, but lists six, and the chart’s highest value is in 2016. An overview of the key patterns, followed by accurate comparisons and selected figures, would make the report more complete and precise.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response follows a generally sensible order, moving from membership ages to loan categories and then to the decade-long trend. Phrases such as “first of all,” “secondly,” and “at last” help signal progression, and the reader can identify which chart is being discussed. However, the response is presented as one continuous block, and some transitions or references are unclear. For example, “this time period highest in table” does not clearly identify the years or values being compared, while “anyone in this table” is difficult to interpret. Use separate paragraphs for the three visuals and connect comparisons explicitly, rather than relying mainly on sequencing words.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “members,” “loan,” “percentage,” and “total number,” so the subject is usually recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are unnatural or imprecise, such as “massive participants,” “loan grabbed,” “old ager,” and “hardly cross.” These expressions sometimes make the intended meaning difficult to follow. There are also spelling and form errors, including “higest” and “scondly”-type usage, and inconsistent apostrophes in “children,s.” Aim for standard chart-reporting language and accurate category names; this will make comparisons clearer and give your vocabulary more flexibility.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to combine information into longer sentences, and the reader can follow the broad sequence of points. However, sentence structures are limited and many are incomplete or faulty, which sometimes obscures relationships between ideas. For instance, “the charts give data about public library in town known as little chalfont” lacks necessary articles and punctuation, while “the year 2013 almost touch the digits of 20,000” has an incorrect verb form and an unclear construction. There are also problems with agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries throughout. Practise writing complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and use accurate past-tense forms when describing the 2016 data and historical figures.

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