Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA

Student answer (Band 4.5)

the given graph show three type of nurtients in food eatin in breakfast,snack,dinner and lunch .the proportion is shwon in the form of tthe percentage .

overall, it is evidet that the sodium have the peak proportion of all time in the dinner. while the lowest is in the snacks time which cantains the lowest sodium .

At first, the dinner have the highest type of nutrients such as sodium t 43% and saturated fats at 37%. how ever in th added fats the highest is the snack which have the percentage of 42%. but in the dinner the added sugar is only23% .whie the breakat and lunch have just 16%,19% respectively.

subsequently the sodium in the breakfast is only 14% hich also have 16% of saturated fats. in addition the snack and lunch had the figours o

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify some important patterns, including dinner as the largest source of sodium (43%) and saturated fat (37%), and snacks as the largest source of added sugar (42%). However, the overview is incomplete: it does not clearly compare all three nutrients, and the claim that snacks have the lowest sodium needs qualification because breakfast is also 14%. Several figures and comparisons are missing, and the final sentence is unfinished, leaving the lunch and snack data unclear. The response also falls 12 words short of the required minimum. To make the summary more complete, give a concise overview of the contrasting peaks and then report the main figures for each meal across all three charts.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic paragraph structure, with an opening, an overview and two detail paragraphs, and it attempts to guide the reader with phrases such as “overall,” “At first” and “subsequently.” However, the progression is difficult to follow because the details are not grouped consistently by meal or nutrient. The final phrase, “the snack and lunch had the figours o,” is incomplete and interrupts the report. Some linking words, including “but” and “in addition,” do not make the relationships between the figures clear. Organise the body paragraphs around a clear comparison—for example, dinner and snacks first, then breakfast and lunch—and ensure each sentence is complete.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “proportion,” “percentage,” “highest” and “lowest,” so the reader can recognise the general subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or forms are inaccurate, such as “three type of nurtients,” “the peak proportion of all time,” and “added fats” when the chart shows added sugar. Frequent spelling errors—including “shwon,” “evidet” and “figours”—also make the report harder to read. Aim for accurate, straightforward terms such as “nutrients,” “accounted for,” and “the largest share.” Check spelling carefully and use the chart’s exact category names consistently.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer comparisons, but grammatical control is weak and errors frequently affect clarity. For example, “the given graph show” has subject–verb disagreement, while “the dinner have the highest type” has problems with both the verb and sentence construction. Articles and sentence boundaries are also unreliable, as in “while the lowest is in the snacks time,” and several clauses run together without clear punctuation. The final sentence is incomplete, so its meaning cannot be recovered. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses using “while” or “whereas.” Check agreement, articles and punctuation, and make sure every sentence has a complete main clause.

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