Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The piecharts compares the percentage of meals which are of three different types of nutrients, and can be harmful if they are eaten in a greater quantity.

Overall, the proportion of dinner in sodium is significantly high than the saturated fat and added sugar while the lowest proportion is snack in the same sodium category. Followed by the proportion of two other piecharts.

Firstly by looking the piecharts in detail the largest proportion is the dinner which is 43% in the sodium chart and 37% in saturated fat chart and 23% in added sugar chart respectively.The lunch proportion is 29% in sodium which is the greatest followed by 26% in saturated fat and 19% in the added sugar.

The snack and breakfast proportion in the sodium chart is the same which is 14%.However, the proportion of snack is 21% in saturated fat and 42% in the added sugar which is the largest proportion.Furthermore, the breakfast in saturated fat and added sugar remains the same which is 16%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main pattern that dinner accounts for the largest shares of sodium and saturated fat, and you correctly report several key figures, including sodium at 43% for dinner and 14% for both breakfast and snacks. You also note that added sugar is highest in snacks at 42%. This gives the response a relevant overview and accurate supporting detail. However, the overview is incomplete: it does not clearly contrast the meal with the highest added-sugar share against the dinner-led pattern for the other nutrients. The claim that lunch is the greatest share in sodium is inaccurate, since dinner is higher. The final sentence also says breakfast is the same for saturated fat and added sugar, but does not explain that both are 16%. A more precise overview and fully accurate comparisons would strengthen the report.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and two paragraphs of detail. The information is generally grouped by nutrient and meal, and linking expressions such as “Firstly,” “However,” and “Furthermore” help signal movement between points. However, progression is not always clear. “Followed by the proportion of two other piecharts” is an incomplete and unclear idea, while the second detail paragraph shifts between sodium, saturated fat, and added sugar without a consistent comparison pattern. Some linking words feel mechanical rather than showing precise relationships. Organise the details around the main contrasts—for example, dinner-led sodium and saturated fat versus snack-led added sugar—and use clear references to each nutrient to make the comparisons easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “proportion,” “largest,” “lowest,” and “respectively,” and the reader can generally understand the comparisons you intend to make. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward, such as “the proportion of dinner in sodium,” “significantly high,” and “the largest proportion is the dinner.” “Piecharts” is also written as one word, and “in a greater quantity” is an unnatural way to describe excessive consumption. Repetition of “proportion” and “chart” limits flexibility. Aim for precise phrases such as “the share of sodium consumed at dinner” and “accounted for,” while varying how you describe percentages. These improvements would make the vocabulary more natural and exact.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mixture of simple statements and longer sentences, including a sentence using “while” and another using “which,” so there is some structural variety. Meaning is usually recoverable, but some grammatical errors remain. The opening has subject–verb disagreement: “The piecharts compares” should be “The pie charts compare.” In “the proportion of dinner in sodium is significantly high,” the comparison structure is incomplete; use “is significantly higher than.” Missing spaces after full stops and the run-on construction around “respectively.The lunch” also affect punctuation. Several phrases lack articles or have awkward sentence structure, including “the largest proportion is the dinner.” Check agreement, comparative forms, and sentence boundaries, and build complex sentences around clear, complete clauses.

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