Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA

IELTS Writing

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given chart states and assets the average percentage of three different nutrients in typical and usually used meals but the statement advocate that all of which may be non healthy if they are taken too much in amount.

Emphasazing and summarizing the sodium we get to knew that dinner have the highest amount used sodium in typical meals in the united states also lunch got about 29% sodium in usa typical meals so it can be hamrful as dinner becuase sodium is taken way more in these two which can cause health problems which can lead to critical and serius conditions .The breakfast and snack got same percentage of sodium about 14% which is normal .

leading towards saturated fats it have got about 37% in dinner and 26% in lunch which is similar to sodium and can lead to physical issues example we can get fat and get health problems if taken fats too much

Asserting the sugar which is a harmful product in my opinion if taken way much .In the united states of america snacks have the highest amount of sugar added in typical meals the other are minimum and is normal but snacks can cause issues and lead to sufficient health problems

AI examiner evaluation

CriterionBand
Task Achievement / Task Response5.5
Coherence and Cohesion5.5
Lexical Resource5.0
Grammatical Range and Accuracy5.0
Overall5.5

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify several important patterns accurately: dinner has the highest sodium share (43%) and saturated-fat share (37%), while snacks account for the largest proportion of added sugar (42%). You also note that breakfast and snacks have equal sodium shares. However, the report is only partly developed: it omits the added-sugar figures for the other meals and the breakfast share for saturated fat, and it gives no clear overview comparing the three nutrients as a whole. Some commentary about health effects replaces chart description, and the claim that lunch sodium is “about 29%” is accurate but not compared with the other meal shares in a systematic way. Include a concise overview and report the main contrasts across all three charts.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic sequence, moving from sodium to saturated fat and then added sugar, and paragraph breaks help distinguish these topics. Some links, such as “leading towards” and “Asserting the sugar,” signal a change of subject. However, there is no clear introductory overview or concluding synthesis, so the reader does not get a logical summary of the charts’ main patterns. Several sentences run together, particularly the sodium discussion, and the repeated use of “which” makes relationships between ideas unclear. Organise the report into an introduction, an overview, and focused detail paragraphs; use direct comparisons and clearer sentence boundaries rather than relying on loosely connected commentary.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “percentage,” “highest amount,” “sodium,” and “saturated fats,” so the subject is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or awkward, such as “the statement advocate,” “usually used meals,” and “taken way much.” Spelling errors including “Emphasazing,” “hamrful,” and “serius” also make the writing less clear. Health-related phrases such as “get fat” and “sufficient health problems” are imprecise and do not help describe the data. Build a more accurate chart-reporting vocabulary, using terms such as “account for,” “proportion,” and “share,” and check spelling and natural word combinations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

There are attempts to form longer sentences and connect ideas with clauses, but control is inconsistent, and many sentences contain errors that make the relationships difficult to follow. For example, “dinner have the highest amount” has subject–verb agreement problems, while “leading towards saturated fats it have got” has an unclear construction and incorrect agreement. Sentence boundaries and punctuation are also unreliable: the sodium section joins several ideas without a full stop, and the added-sugar section begins with a fragment. Use straightforward sentence patterns accurately first, then add controlled comparisons with structures such as “whereas” and “while.” Check agreement, articles, and punctuation when editing.

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