Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The pi charts shown in below mean percentages in some foods of different nutrients,all of which may be unsafe if eaten too much.

In sodium and saturated fat percentage of ingredients in increasing dynamically but the percentage of ingreadients in lunch decreases.Percentage of sodium in dinner is approximately half and the percentage of saturated fat in lunch is one fourth of total.

Second and third ingredients which names are saturated fat and added sugar overall no same order have been found same saturated fat and sugar remain same in breakfast but a very jump have been seen in snacks which become double in saturated fat to added sugar remaning have slighter decreases.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the three nutrients and make a few relevant comparisons, including that dinner has the highest sodium share and snacks have a notably high added-sugar share. However, the report is very brief and does not give a clear, accurate overview of the main patterns. The claim that sodium and saturated-fat percentages increase dynamically is unclear, and the statement that lunch decreases does not specify the comparison. Several figures and relationships are omitted, while “approximately half” for sodium at dinner is imprecise: the chart shows 43%. The response also falls 38 words short of the required minimum. To improve, write a fuller summary with a clear overview and select key figures, such as dinner’s leading shares of sodium and saturated fat and snacks’ leading share of added sugar.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to group information: the first paragraph introduces the charts, and the following sentences compare nutrient categories. This gives the response some overall direction. However, the ideas are not arranged in a clear progression, and the second paragraph combines several comparisons without explaining how they relate. Phrases such as “Second and third ingredients” and “remaning have slighter decreases” make the relationships difficult to follow. Linking is also limited, with “but” and “which” carrying too much of the organisation. Use separate, logically ordered sentences or paragraphs for the main patterns, and make each comparison explicit—for example, compare dinner and snacks across the three nutrients.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt task-related vocabulary, including “sodium,” “saturated fat,” “added sugar,” “percentage,” and “snacks,” so the reader can recognise the subject. However, the range is basic and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate enough to strain understanding. “Ingredients” is not the right term for the chart’s nutrient shares, while “increasing dynamically” and “a very jump” do not express the intended trends naturally. There are also spelling errors such as “pi charts,” “ingreadients,” and “remaning.” Build a small set of precise chart-reporting expressions, such as “accounted for,” “proportion,” “highest share,” and “rose to,” and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to connect ideas in longer sentences, for example with “but” and “which,” but sentence structures remain limited and are often difficult to interpret. Errors in articles, word order, agreement, and sentence construction appear throughout: “The pi charts shown in below mean percentages” lacks a clear grammatical structure, and “Second and third ingredients which names are…” is not a complete, well-formed clause. The sentence about sodium and saturated fat also leaves the relationship between the percentages unclear. Punctuation and spacing need attention, including the missing space after “nutrients,”. Practise writing short, complete comparison sentences first, then combine them with accurate clauses such as “while” or “whereas.”

See this exact question answered at other band scores. The same prompt compared across bands.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.