Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-07-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The pie charts show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Overall the dinner is mostly occupied by high percentages of sodium and saturated fat making the dinner unhealthy with these certainly high percentages. Added sugar is main component of snacks leading it a unhealthy item. Breakfast seems to have qual proportions of al three nutrients consumed in USA which can be considered as a healthy meal with balanced percentages.

Breakfast includes 14% sodium and equal percentages of saturated fats and added sugar of 16% each. Lunch contains majorly sodium of 29%, then 26% of saturated fat and 19% of added sugar.

Snack is mostly filled with added sugar which is 42%, then 21% of saturated fat and 14% of sodium.

Dinner has major contribution from sodium which os 43%, 37% of saturated fats and only 23% of added sugar comparitively.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the main features of the charts. You successfully highlight the key trends, such as the high sodium content in dinner and the high sugar content in snacks. However, the analysis is somewhat descriptive and lacks a more sophisticated synthesis of the data. For instance, while you mention the percentages, you could improve by grouping the nutrients more effectively to show the overall nutritional profile of each meal type. The overview is present but could be more analytical regarding the health implications rather than just stating they are unhealthy.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is logically organized with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs for each meal type. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the data. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and repetitive (e.g., 'Breakfast includes', 'Lunch contains', 'Snack is'). To reach a higher band, you should use a wider variety of linking words and transition phrases to connect your ideas more fluidly, such as 'In contrast', 'Furthermore', or 'Conversely', which would help the reader follow the comparisons between the different nutrients more easily.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. You rely on basic descriptors like 'mostly occupied', 'major contribution', and 'filled with'. There are also some minor errors in word choice, such as 'qual proportions' (likely meant 'equal') and 'os' (a typo for 'is'). To improve, try to incorporate more precise academic vocabulary related to data description, such as 'predominant', 'constitute', 'account for', or 'proportionate'. The current range is sufficient to convey the meaning, but it does not demonstrate the flexibility required for higher bands.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5

The response uses a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors, such as 'leading it a unhealthy item' (should be 'making it an unhealthy item') and 'comparitively' (spelling error). Additionally, there are issues with article usage and prepositional phrases. While these errors do not significantly impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and ensuring consistent use of articles would greatly improve the accuracy of your writing.

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