Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-07-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The given chart depicts the average proportion in various meals of different variety of nutrients, which may be unhealthy.

Overall, it is clearly visible that the majority percentage of sodium and saturated fat is taken in dinner whereas it is vice versa in the case of sugar.

It can be observed that in USA 43 percent of sodium is added in dinner which may considered unhealthy whereas, 14 percent of it is add on snack which is similar to the percent in breakfast. However, Lunch contain 29 percent of sodium which seems greater then the proportion of other two meals accept dinner. The percentage of saturated fat in snack is is 21 and in breakfast is 16 which may be harmful for health. Furthermore, in night meal 37 percent of saturated fat is added which is higher than the proportion of fat in lunch as it figured to 26 percent.

Moving further, The masses of USA add 42 percent of sugar in snack and 16 percent of it in breakfast which contains a lot of fat and result to obesity, along with it 19 percent of sugar nutrient is added to afternoon meal. Moreover, during night , meal contains 23 percent of sugar in it that may be hurtful.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the main features of the three nutrients across four meal types. You successfully highlight the key trends, such as the high sodium and saturated fat content in dinner compared to the high sugar content in snacks. However, the analysis is slightly hindered by some inaccurate reporting of the data (e.g., stating 29% for lunch sodium when the chart shows 29% for lunch, but describing it as 'greater than the proportion of other two meals accept dinner' is slightly confusing). To reach a higher band, ensure that comparisons are more precise and that the summary clearly distinguishes between the three nutrients throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the information. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'However', 'Furthermore', and 'Moving further' to transition between ideas. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly repetitive. Additionally, the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the sentence 'which is similar to the percent in breakfast', where the connection to the previous clause could be smoother. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear thematic focus would enhance the flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'proportion', 'nutrients', and 'saturated fat'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'add on snack', 'night meal', and 'masses of USA'. These errors do not impede communication, but they do limit the precision of your writing. To improve, focus on using more natural collocations and academic phrasing. For example, instead of 'night meal', use 'dinner' or 'evening meal', and ensure that verbs like 'add' are used correctly in the passive voice.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you attempt to use complex sentences, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'Lunch contain', 'meal contains'), article usage, and prepositions (e.g., 'in USA' instead of 'in the USA'). There are also some punctuation and spelling slips, such as the double 'is' in 'snack is is 21'. While these errors rarely prevent the reader from understanding your meaning, they are frequent enough to keep the score in the 5.5–6.0 range. Focusing on proofreading for basic agreement and article usage would be highly beneficial.

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