Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-07-30
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA
Student answer (Band 6.5)
The given three pie charts illustrates information about three types of unhealthy nutrients people eat every day in life.
Overall. it is evident that the most noticeable features are the main trends and significant differences presented in the visual information. while some people consume food which have high amount of sodium and saturated fat in dinner. The large amount of added sugar had in snack. In addition, the highest value ware recorded for dinner and snack whereas breakfast have sodium, saturated fat and sugar in similar.
Turning to the details, people eat breakfast almost similar nutrients sodium at 14%, saturated fat and sugar at 16% respectively. Similarly, lunch had 29% sodium, saturated fat is 26% and sugar only 19%. Sugar is clear contrast can be observed low between these two categories. This indicates a noticeable change throughout the pie chart.
In comparison, snack have sodium only 14%, saturated fat 21% and the sugar contain high proportion at 42%. whereas dinner the remain categories sodium have 43% it is high figure and fat 37% and 23% only sugar. overall, the data highlights the key information rather then individual details.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5
The response covers the main features of the charts, identifying key trends such as the high sugar content in snacks and the high sodium and fat levels in dinner. However, the analysis is somewhat mechanical and lacks a clear, cohesive overview. While the data is presented, the comparison between categories is occasionally confusing, such as the statement that breakfast has 'similar' nutrients, which is not fully supported by the percentages provided. The response would benefit from a more analytical approach that groups the data more effectively rather than listing percentages for each meal type in isolation.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical flow is hindered by awkward phrasing and repetitive sentence structures. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Turning to the details' and 'In comparison', but they are sometimes applied in a way that does not naturally connect the ideas. The referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly in the second paragraph where the connection between the sentences is weak. The overall progression of ideas is present but feels somewhat disjointed, making the reader work harder than necessary to follow the comparison of the data.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. There are several instances of awkward word choice, such as 'had in snack' instead of 'found in snacks' and 'sugar is clear contrast can be observed'. The student relies on basic terminology and struggles with collocations related to data description. While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of sophisticated or varied vocabulary limits the score. To improve, the student should focus on using more precise verbs and nouns related to statistical trends, such as 'account for', 'constitute', or 'a significant proportion'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede readability. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('The given three pie charts illustrates'), incorrect verb forms ('highest value ware recorded'), and missing articles or prepositions. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of full stops where commas or conjunctions would be more appropriate. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the response from reaching a higher band. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement would be highly beneficial.
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