Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The pie charts demonstrates the average proportions in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be eat unhealthy too much like sodium, saturated fat and added sugar in meals.

Overall, high amount of added sugar found in snacks compared to sodium and saturated fat in meals. However, breakfast have equal percent of saturated fat and added sugar are present in meals and comparatively less sodium in snacks.

In addition, breakfast contains less proportion of sodium which is 14 percent and 16 percent in saturated fat and added sugar. However, Snacks have large amount of added sugar which is 42 Percent and comparatively large proportion of sodium in dinner which is 43 percent.

In addition, In lunch equal amount of sodium and saturated fat which is around 26 Percent. Moreover, Dinner content different proportion as sodium 43 percent, saturated fat 37 percent and added sugar 27 percent.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response covers the main features of the charts, identifying key data points for sodium, saturated fats, and added sugars across the four meal categories. However, the analysis is somewhat mechanical and lacks a cohesive synthesis of the data. While the main trends are identified, the comparison between categories is occasionally confusing, such as the statement regarding breakfast nutrients. The overview is present but could be more effectively integrated to highlight the most significant differences, such as the high sodium in dinner versus the high sugar in snacks. To reach a higher band, ensure that data points are grouped logically rather than listing them meal by meal.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat repetitive and occasionally mechanical, such as the frequent use of 'In addition' and 'However'. The progression of ideas is sometimes disjointed, particularly in the second and third paragraphs where the transition between meal types feels abrupt. Referencing is generally clear, but the flow between sentences could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words and phrases to better connect the comparisons being made.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing the student to describe the data points clearly. There are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'demonstrates' (should be plural 'demonstrate') and 'eat unhealthy' (should be 'consumed in unhealthy amounts'). The range of vocabulary is somewhat limited, relying on basic terms like 'large amount' and 'proportion'. To improve, the student should aim to incorporate more precise academic vocabulary related to data description, such as 'constitute', 'account for', or 'predominant'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures. There are several grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('The pie charts demonstrates', 'breakfast have'), incorrect preposition usage, and awkward phrasing ('Dinner content different proportion'). While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to be noticeable. The student should focus on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement and pluralisation to ensure greater accuracy in their writing.

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