Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-02
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA
Student answer (Band 6.5)
The pie chart illustrates the mean percentage of sodium, saturated fats and added sugar in typical meal eaten in USA. The unit is measured in Percentage.
In result , sodium and saturated fat has the highest mount of percentage in dinner . On the other hand , added sugar is most consumed in snack . However , in breakfast all three are consumed in the least amount .
In terms for sodium , dinner takes up the majority of the percentage with 43%, followed by lunch with 29%. Meanwhile , snack and breakfast at the last with 14%.
Similarly , saturated fat is also consumed highest in dinner with 37%, followed by lunch with 27% and snack with 23% , breakfast coming in last with 16%.
As for added sugar, showing a different proportion snacks takes up the most with 42% , followed by dinner with 23% and lunch with 19% , breakfast still with the least 16% .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0
The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the main features and making relevant comparisons. You successfully highlighted the key trends, such as dinner being the primary source for sodium and saturated fats, while snacks dominate added sugar intake. The overview is present, though it could be more clearly separated from the body paragraphs to ensure the 'main features' are highlighted immediately. The data is accurately reported, and the comparisons between meal types are logical. To reach a higher band, ensure the overview provides a more comprehensive summary of the overall trends rather than just listing the highest values.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The response is logically organized, with each nutrient discussed in its own paragraph. You use some cohesive devices like 'Meanwhile', 'Similarly', and 'As for', which help the reader follow the progression of information. However, the paragraphing is slightly fragmented, and some transitions feel a bit mechanical. The use of referencing could be improved to avoid repetitive sentence structures. For example, instead of starting every sentence with a prepositional phrase, try varying the sentence structure to improve the flow of ideas. Overall, the information is easy to follow, but the cohesion could be more sophisticated.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.5
You have an adequate range of vocabulary to convey the information, using terms like 'proportion', 'consumed', and 'majority'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'highest mount of percentage' (should be 'highest percentage') and 'In terms for sodium' (should be 'In terms of sodium'). The vocabulary is functional but lacks the precision and variety required for higher bands. To improve, focus on using more varied synonyms for 'consumed' or 'percentage' and ensure that collocations are natural and grammatically correct.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation. For instance, there are issues with subject-verb agreement ('sodium and saturated fat has' should be 'have') and missing articles ('in typical meal' should be 'in a typical meal'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary spaces before commas. While these errors do not impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy and article usage would significantly improve your score.
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