Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-06
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The pie charts give information about the average percentages in typical meals of three method of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
Overall, it can be clearly seen that in sodium largest part of dinner. While added sugar in lowest part of lunch. Moreover Saturated fat and Added sugar both are same part in breakfast.
In sodium highest part of dinner whereas lowest percentage both are which snack and breakfast. And lunch are two time in snack and breakfast both at around 29%.In saturated fat dinner is highest part and lunch and dinner are both same part of sodium and sugar 43%.
In snack highest part is sugar while lowest part is lunch.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the ability to fully develop the task. While the student attempts to identify some features, the description is fragmented and lacks a clear, comprehensive overview of the data. Many comparisons are confusing or mathematically inaccurate (e.g., stating 'lunch and dinner are both same part of sodium and sugar 43%'), making it difficult for the reader to follow the trends. The report lacks the necessary detail and analytical depth required for an Academic Task 1 response.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks logical progression. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the sentences within the paragraphs are disjointed and often lack cohesive devices to link ideas effectively. The use of referencing is unclear, and the transition between the introduction and the body paragraphs is abrupt. The overall structure is mechanical, and the lack of clear logical flow makes the information difficult to interpret. More attention is needed to organize data points into coherent groups rather than listing them in isolation.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. The student relies on basic terms like 'part', 'highest', and 'lowest' throughout the response. There are errors in word choice, such as 'three method of nutrients' instead of 'three types of nutrients'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to demonstrate the precision required for describing statistical data. To improve, the student should incorporate more varied terminology related to trends and proportions, such as 'proportion', 'constitute', 'account for', and 'predominant'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are issues with sentence structure, such as fragments ('And lunch are two time in snack and breakfast both at around 29%') and missing articles or incorrect prepositions. Subject-verb agreement is also inconsistent. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple, poorly constructed sentences. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the persistent errors in basic grammar make the text difficult to read and understand.
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