Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA

Student answer (Band 5.0)

THE BELOW MENTION PIE DIAGRAMS DEPICTS AVERAGE PORTION OF THE MAINLY THREE TYPE OF INGRIDEANCE ARE ADD UP IN INTO DAILY MEALS, AMONG ALL THE ARE NEGATIVELY EFFECT IF IT MUCH USED BY USA. LOOKING FROM THE OVERALL PERSPECTIVE, IT IS EVIDENT THAT MORE NUMBER OF ADDED SUGAR AVAILABLE IN SNACKS WHILE SODIUM WAS LOWEST IN BREAKFAST AND SNACK.

TO BEGIN WITH, SODIUM WAS THE HIGHEST CONSUMED DURING DINNER WHICH IS 43%. MOREOVER, IN SNACK THE AMOUNT WAS 14% WHICH WAS AS SAME AS FOUNDED IN BREAKFAST. MEANWHILE, 29% OF SODIUM WAS THE HIGHEST WHEN TALK ABOUT TO LUNCH. MOVING TO MEXT

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, reaching only 102 words. This significantly impacts the ability to fully address the task. While you have attempted to identify some data points, the report is incomplete; you have not described the saturated fats or added sugars categories at all, which are essential parts of the prompt. The overview is also very limited. To improve, you must ensure all categories are covered and provide a comprehensive summary of the main trends and comparisons across all three nutrients to satisfy the requirements of an Academic Task 1 response.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response is fragmented and lacks a logical structure. The introduction is poorly phrased, and the body paragraph is cut off abruptly with 'MOVING TO MEXT', indicating an unfinished response. While there are some attempts at cohesive devices like 'To begin with' and 'Moreover', the overall progression of ideas is hindered by the lack of completion and the disjointed nature of the sentences. To achieve a higher score, you need to organize your report into clear paragraphs—typically an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs—ensuring that your ideas flow logically from one point to the next.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and contains several errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'INGRIDEANCE' instead of 'ingredients' and 'PIE DIAGRAMS' (the charts are bar charts). The phrasing is often unnatural, such as 'AMONG ALL THE ARE NEGATIVELY EFFECT IF IT MUCH USED'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information with precision. You should focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary for describing data, such as 'proportion', 'consumption', 'fluctuated', and 'accounted for', and practice using these in the context of comparing different categories.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors that impede the clarity of the writing. Issues include incorrect verb forms ('THE BELOW MENTION PIE DIAGRAMS DEPICTS'), missing articles, and awkward sentence structures ('MORE NUMBER OF ADDED SUGAR AVAILABLE'). The sentence construction is basic and often grammatically incorrect, which makes the text difficult to follow. You need to work on basic sentence structure, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of articles. Focusing on writing simple, error-free sentences before attempting more complex structures will help improve your accuracy significantly.

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