Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA
Student answer (Band 4.5)
As the graphs shows the percentage of sodium , saturated fats and added sugar in a day meal of individuals in USA . We all know that there is a limit of everything no matter what it is if we try to cross that limit we can face various challenges in our day to day life . So as the topic is about the consumption of sodium , saturated fats and added sugar in meal so yes, it also has the limit for consuming if we cross that limit then we mat various health issues in our day to day life which is not good for our health . So the data shows that individuals consume 14 % sodium in breakfast , 29% in lunch , 43% in dinner and 14 % in snacks which means the individuals are consuming a large amount of sodium in the 1 day meal . Data also shows that the consumers are consuming 16% in breakfast , 26% in lunch , 37% in dinner and 21% in snacks, and it also shows that sugar is also consuming in large amount in 1 day meal so it clearly shows that individuals should check there daily meal so that they may know what they are consuming and what would be the side effect happen if they consume it in large amount .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the requirements of an Academic Task 1 report. Instead of providing an objective summary of the data, the response includes significant amounts of irrelevant personal opinion and advice, such as 'We all know that there is a limit of everything'. Furthermore, the data reporting is incomplete; you omitted the 'saturated fats' category entirely and failed to provide a clear overview or comparison of the three nutrients. To improve, focus strictly on describing the trends and key features of the charts without adding personal commentary or moralizing about health.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5
The response is written as a single, long paragraph, which makes it difficult to follow. There is a lack of logical progression, and the transition between the introduction and the data description is abrupt. Cohesive devices are largely absent or used in a repetitive, mechanical way, such as the frequent use of 'so' to connect ideas. To improve, you should organize your report into clear paragraphs: an introduction, an overview of the main trends, and specific details. Use a wider variety of linking words like 'in contrast', 'furthermore', or 'whereas' to connect your sentences.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic phrases like 'consuming a large amount' and 'in a day meal'. There are also issues with word choice, such as 'sugar is also consuming', which is grammatically incorrect and imprecise. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe the data effectively. To reach a higher band, try to use more precise terminology related to data description, such as 'account for', 'constitute', 'proportion', or 'fluctuate', and avoid repeating the same verbs and nouns throughout the text.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('the graphs shows'), incorrect verb forms ('sugar is also consuming'), and punctuation errors, such as unnecessary spaces before commas. The sentence structures are mostly simple or repetitive, lacking the complexity required for higher bands. Many sentences are run-on, making the text feel disjointed. Focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring that subjects and verbs agree, and using correct punctuation before attempting more complex structures.
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