Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA

Student answer (Band 4.0)

in these pie chart they represent the amount of minerals consumed by the people of the USA in there meals on daily bases it is a study and result of all the minerals consumed by the peoples.

in these pie chart the researcher tells us about three main minerals of there diet in the first one he tells us about the sodium which is and mineral found in our daily life food excessive use of sodium can also harm us in diff ways normally amercians take most of the sdium in there diner and they take least amout in there breakfast

and then there in saturated fat and added sugar these tow are often consumed excessively by amercans in there daily life food, it is very dangerious for a human body to consume them in excessive amount it can make a healthy man lazy and fat and overweight in just couple of months

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to adequately summarise the data. While it mentions the three nutrients, it does not provide a clear overview or report specific data points from the charts. The description is highly subjective and includes irrelevant personal commentary (e.g., 'it is very dangerious... it can make a healthy man lazy'), which is not appropriate for an Academic Task 1 report. The task requires an objective summary of the information presented in the charts, but the student focuses on general health advice rather than comparing the percentages across the different meal types. Consequently, the key features are not highlighted.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response lacks logical organisation. There is no clear paragraph structure, and the text is presented as a series of loosely connected, run-on sentences. Cohesive devices are almost entirely absent, making the progression of ideas difficult to follow. The use of referencing is unclear, and the lack of punctuation further hinders the flow of information. To improve, the student should use clear paragraphing—one for the introduction/overview and one or two for the detailed comparison—and employ linking words such as 'whereas', 'in contrast', or 'furthermore' to connect ideas.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. There are frequent spelling errors, such as 'amercans' for 'Americans', 'sdium' for 'sodium', and 'diner' for 'dinner'. The student relies on basic, informal language that is not suitable for an academic report. There is no attempt to use precise terminology related to data description (e.g., 'proportion', 'account for', 'significant'). The range is insufficient to convey the information accurately, and the errors in word choice and spelling are persistent throughout the text.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical control is weak. The text consists of long, poorly structured sentences with frequent errors in punctuation, capitalization, and subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'in these pie chart they represent'). There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the basic sentences often contain errors that impede clarity. Punctuation is almost entirely missing, which makes the text difficult to parse. The student needs to focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring that each sentence has a clear subject and verb, and learning how to use periods to separate distinct thoughts.

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