Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-26
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The pie charts compare the average percentage in typical meals of three types of nutrients, these may be unhealthy if consuming too much.
Overall, it is clear that sodium and saturated fat recorded the highest amount in dinner. While they had lowest in snacks and breakfast respectively. Moreover, added sugar had highest amount in snack.
To the outset, dinner had highest amount of sodium as compared to saturated fat. Which is around 43% and 37% respectively. Snacks had 21% saturated fat over 14 % sodium, while breakfast had similar amount of sodium and saturated fat approximately 14%. Furthermore, sodium constituted 29% share in lunch and it is more than saturated fat which is only 26%.
On the other hand, added sugar recorded highest amount in sugar, which is around 42%. While, breakfast had similar amount of saturated fat and added sugar. lunch and dinner had comparable amount of added sugar, which is approximately 19% and 23% respectively and it is far less than the amount of sodium and saturated fat in dinner.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the main features of the three nutrients across the four meal types. You have successfully selected key data points for comparison, such as the high levels of sodium and saturated fat in dinner and the prevalence of added sugar in snacks. However, the analysis is slightly hampered by some inaccuracies in data reporting (e.g., stating added sugar is highest in 'sugar' instead of 'snacks') and a lack of clear synthesis in the final paragraph. To improve, ensure that all comparisons are precise and that the overview clearly highlights the most significant trends across all categories.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear progression of ideas. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'Moreover', and 'On the other hand' to link your points. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly awkward, such as 'To the outset', which is not a standard phrase. Additionally, some sentences are fragmented or lack smooth transitions, which occasionally disrupts the flow of information. Improving the variety and accuracy of your linking words will help your ideas connect more naturally and elevate your score.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'constituted', 'comparable', and 'nutrients'. However, there are some word choice errors and inaccuracies, such as 'recorded the highest amount in dinner' (should be 'at dinner') and 'highest amount in sugar' (referring to the category). There is also some repetition of basic verbs like 'had'. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise collocations and avoiding repetitive phrasing. Expanding your vocabulary to include more varied ways to describe data trends would also be beneficial.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you attempt to use complex sentences, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with articles, prepositions, and sentence fragments (e.g., 'Which is around 43%...'). Some sentences are also missing necessary subjects or verbs, which makes the writing feel slightly disjointed. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and ensuring every sentence is complete will significantly improve your accuracy.
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