Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The pie chart depicts that the average proportion of three unhealthy

neutrition of sodium,saturated fat and added sugar in meals consumed in the USA.

Overall it is clear that the sugar porportion of snack is maximum

are very unhealthy .

Commencing with the sodium and saturated fat,that are breakfast

almost same at sodium breakfast consumption is 14%,saturated fat

is 16%.Dinner consumed is 43% higher than dinner of saturated fat.

The average of lunch in both are almost same.Saturated fat snack 21% maximum than sodium consumption snack are 14%.

On the other hand added sugar snacks consumed maximum than other three the average of 42%.Breakfast is 16%and the dinner consumotion is 23%.The lun

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. Furthermore, the response is incomplete, ending abruptly mid-sentence. While you have identified some of the data points, the summary is fragmented and lacks a clear, cohesive overview of the main trends. You have attempted to compare the nutrients, but the lack of development and the failure to complete the task prevent a higher score. To improve, ensure you provide a full summary that covers all categories and complete your sentences to provide a coherent analysis of the data.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The essay lacks logical organization and paragraphing. The ideas are presented in a disjointed manner, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the three nutrients. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link sentences and ideas effectively. For example, the transition between discussing sodium/saturated fat and added sugar is abrupt. To improve, use clear paragraphing—one for the introduction/overview and one or two for the body—and employ linking words such as 'in contrast,' 'furthermore,' or 'consequently' to guide the reader through your analysis.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary is quite limited and contains several errors, such as 'neutrition' (nutrition) and 'porportion' (proportion). You rely on basic descriptors like 'maximum' and 'same,' which do not demonstrate the range required for higher bands. There is also a lack of precision when describing the data. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of synonyms and more precise academic vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'account for,' 'constitute,' or 'a significant proportion.' Additionally, ensure you proofread for basic spelling errors.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with sentence structure, such as 'The pie chart depicts that the average proportion of three unhealthy neutrition of sodium...', which is grammatically incomplete. Subject-verb agreement and preposition usage are also inconsistent. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple, error-prone sentences. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and ensure that every sentence has a clear subject and verb. Practice using complex structures, such as relative clauses or comparative forms, to enhance your grammatical range.

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